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lady of the night--4 haiku/senyru
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lady of the night--4 haiku/senyru |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA 
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lady of the night lost forever to the wind his heart sighs again lady of the night her song is no longer heard lost in autumn leaves lady of the night will he ever hear her heart? or has winter come? lady of the night has winter come to your heart? sing to me again ------------------------------------------------------------- < !signature--> That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl [This message has been edited by Sven (edited 10-20-2000).] |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
Sven, your haikus are very well done. Sad, but a good read. Elizabeth Something sweet, something sort of grandish, sweeps my soul when thou art near... hedeservesbetter@hotmail.com |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
Beautifully..wonderfully..sad.. Is pain an addiction for writers? |
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Snow
since 2000-10-16
Posts 1170desert flower looking for rain |
this is the first of yours that I've read and I look forward to seeing more. Well done. Snow |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Elizabeth, thank you my friend. . . the autumn always does this to me. . . Temptress, pain and love my friend. . . the poets drugs. . . where would we be without them?  Thank you. . . Snow. . . it is my pleasure to welcome you here to Passions. . . and thank you. . . --------------------------------------------------------< !signature--> That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl [This message has been edited by Sven (edited 10-19-2000).] |
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inot2B Member Elite
since 2000-09-18
Posts 2205Arkansas |
As always Sven you paint a picture of a very lonesome heart. Beautifully done. |
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Irie Senior Member
since 1999-12-01
Posts 1493Washington State |
Much enjoyed Sir! ~Sheri "The things that come to those that wait may be the things left by those who got there first" |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
Sven, this is pure romance, and man, do I love to read those romantic poems, thank you! "When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass, and the sun drips honey."" Laurie Lee Kathleen |
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Elizabeth Cor Senior Member
since 2000-10-13
Posts 879Over the river and through the woods |
Mmm, lovely. Nostalgic and darling. Particularly liked this stanza: lady of the night has winter come to your heart? sing to me again ...wonderful. Oh, and a side note: 5-7-5 stanzas that do not directly deal with with nature are actually considered Senyrus... just letting ya know  .~ Beth |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
inot2b. . . sometimes, the autumn does that to a heart. . . especially now. . . thank you. . . Irie, thank you my friend. . . Kathleen, you like to read romantic poems?  thank you so much. . . there will be more, I promise. . . Elizabeth, thank you. . . I wasn't sure if these were haiku or senryu. . . but I guess you could look at them either way. . . which is why I changed the title. . . thanks. . . ---------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Sven methinks this lady comes in the shadows entreating you, follow for her heart is thine thee knows this well as you've cast thy spell now sing, Sire, sing her song is your heart hear this love ring... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?...KRJ |
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juliet_2u Senior Member
since 2000-07-23
Posts 1125North Carolina |
Sven these are so lovely. So warm and caring, just like your heart. As with everything you write a pleasure to read. Always, Juls |
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juliet_2u Senior Member
since 2000-07-23
Posts 1125North Carolina |
Hope you didn't mind another read. Juls [This message has been edited by juliet_2u (edited 10-20-2000).] |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
I could understand your double appelation - as when I read 'lady of the night' I thought senryu but the seasonal references - made me see haiku so I decided after the last "who cares? they're beautiful!" |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Sven~ Hi friend Wonderful read although sad and lonely piece...you've penned another fine write my friend..well done Take care Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Lady of the day a heart thawing in daylight singing once again. I love Haikus Sven, this was well written. Applause!! |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Sven~ Extremely well-written senryu's. You do these very nicely with a lovely bringing of thoughts. Enjoyed and hope to see more. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Sunshine. . . I only wish that I could. . . thank you my friend. . . Juls, thank you. . . and I never mind a double read! Wilfred, I know. . .like me, these are a little hard to put labels on. . . but it's all the same, it's poetry. . . thank you sir! tracie, thank you. . . just how I'm feeling these days. . . GS, thank you for the verse. . . I can only hope that one day, the sun will shine again. . . thank you my friend. . . Marge, I've always liked haiku and senryu. . . I may do more. . . thank you! ----------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Julie Jordan Scott Member
since 1999-09-19
Posts 146Bakersfield, CA USA |
Sven, I especially enjoyed the imagery of the seasons. I find myself wondering what will the Spring embrace.... Thanks! JULIE |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Julie. . . The Spring will bring back something. . . if I only knew what that was. . .thank you. . . ----------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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