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Mona Lisa
Member

since 1999-08-25

Posts 100
Halifax, Nova Scotia

0 posted 2000-10-18 07:49 PM

You, in slivered layers
of ripened jackets
that hinder manifestation
of your vulnerable sphere
Domestic chisels on the side
wait to carve a slice
of your complex cloak
Mishandling with care
tore away the outer bronze
that was your pride
You cried for days,
sought hibernation
in that cold place
a transparent veil
your heart to hide
on pungent sleeves
Stayed from view
in state of rest
But greedy hands
still reach out
the bulb to kill
Tied in hungry knots
the pangs of savoury need
urge the malnutritioned pit
the opalescence to peel away
The hacking of the blade begins
you, blinded by their silver glare
victimized again,
by connoisseurs'
strategic dicing
and other tricks

[This message has been edited by Mona Lisa (edited 10-18-2000).]

Sunshine

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Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

1 posted 2000-10-18 08:00 PM

Well shoot...here you went and did it...and I admire the innuendo...

this is great!

Karilea
If I whisper, will you listen?...KRJ

Mona Lisa
Member

since 1999-08-25

Posts 100
Halifax, Nova Scotia

2 posted 2000-10-18 08:11 PM

So I havent lost my marbles for likening human beings to onions? Whew! Thank goodness. I had myself worried there for a minute!

Anyways, thank you. I'm glad you liked it. My mind works in weird ways and I get ideas out of nowhere about the silliest things sometimes.

Thanks again

Sunshine

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since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

3 posted 2000-10-18 08:14 PM

Mona, do a "search" and you will find more onions than you know what to do with...use my pseudonym or doreen peri, and you will see what I mean...

Karilea
If I whisper, will you listen?...KRJ

Mona Lisa
Member

since 1999-08-25

Posts 100
Halifax, Nova Scotia

4 posted 2000-10-18 08:20 PM

So I'm among company then?

I guess I'll do a search to find out what other kinds of "onions" are here.

[This message has been edited by Mona Lisa (edited 10-18-2000).]

Daniel J D
Senior Member

since 2000-10-01

Posts 1471
Hillcrest, Queensland, Australia

5 posted 2000-10-18 09:27 PM

Mona Lisa,
Well thought of poem, perhaps the title of
"Vulnerable sphere",may have been more appropriate. Greatly sliced stuff!

Respond to my call and let the waves of my heart fill your life with the wonders of love
(Daniel J D)

vlraynes
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-25

Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...

6 posted 2000-10-24 12:56 PM

Mona-
   WOW!  well this is the first 'onion'
   poem i've read, and i LOVE it!
   this is great.

   -vicky

"...until you have read the verse on his
heart, you have not truely met the poet."
-vlraynes

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