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To Stretch
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To Stretch |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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To Stretch I wanted stretching, movement out, out of this little space where words fly around like flecks of air in the sun, haphazard as dust. And I see now that stretching is something that happens to the coil of road that travels through the mine fields of the spirit, sometimes you slither on it, for explosions hurt and pieces of you could fall in enemy territory, then you’d have to sort out who is, and who is not the enemy in the face of promises that pass and do not say danger, and I must remember that the meadow across the street looks even prettier then the one beneath my feet, but it is not. I prefer just to stroll, for if I show fear the lion will chase me across the tundra, peacefulness is the key, you see, to staying alive, and then when I’m sure that the ground will hold my big thinking, then, jump and shout, run and slide across the feeling, dig a hole, just so to plant joy, and then sit back and watch it grow but remember it will need tears, there is just no getting around that. It is really all so complicated, isn’t it, this thing that bleeds feeling, this heart that breaks and sheds so much crystal and all these thoughts now like marbles rolling away from my meaning until all I can see is a rainbow of color collecting against the horizon and sinking slowly from violet to crimson, so hot now in its proximity to knowing that it hisses as it touches the first star. And does any of this make sense anyway, and does it really matter if it doesn’t for I still have my space and I can see that I have stretched some, there are marks to prove it, imprinted into my glazed and jeweled reflection, yes, I have stretched. [This message has been edited by Martie (edited 10-18-2000).] |
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SEA 
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since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Martie~ you "stretch" so much better than most of us do! and I must remember that the meadow across the street looks even prettier then the one beneath my feet, but it is not.  -SEA |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Peacefulness is indeed the key to staying alive, MArtie....once again beautiful writing  |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
omg OMG Martie, this is just so amazing that I am lost for words, I'm sitting here with my chin on the floor, I want to stand up and yell, "Martie YOU'RE A STAR" indeed you are Maree "If my words could blanket the skies and fill every corner and crevice of this earth, still this won't be enough" "Maree Russo" |
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Denise
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since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
I'm picking my chin up off the floor too! WOW! What images you created in my mind! Absolutely wonderful! Denise |
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Gemini Senior Member
since 1999-12-15
Posts 1203Wisconsin, USA |
You write some very descriptive power of feelings with this one, very awesome, I liked. |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
" when I’m sure that the ground will hold my big thinking, then, jump and shout, run and slide across the feeling, dig a hole, just so to plant joy, and then sit back and watch it grow but remember it will need tears, there is just no getting around that." I love how your mind thinks and the way you express yourself - this whole poem is beautiful!  |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Sea--I don't think so...this one may have pulled a muscle or two. Balladeer--Just a couple of minutes a day of peace would be nice...thanks deer. Maree--I'm so glad you liked this...I'm not sure that I do. Thanks for letting me know, now pick up your chin. Gemini--Yes, they were powerful...thank you. Bill--Thanks for your sweet comment...now, have you got some aspirin? Denise--You make me smile. |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Martie, I'm astounded, this is soooo great. You are an absolutely brilliant poet, this is spectactular. Just Wow You know that I really love this, just checking?! Take care Marsha |
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Poertree Senior Member
since 1999-11-05
Posts 1359UK |
martie, for once i have to disagree with my aussie friend. while this had a few of your usual stunning images and allusions it seemed to me somehow to lack the cohesiveness of most of your recent poems. it seemed somehow overly fragmented, or maybe disjointed is a better word. in some ways, given the theme or message, this may not be a bad thing at all: "where words fly around like flecks of air in the sun" well the poem seemed to do that to some extent ..... perhaps it's just me - maybe i'm a control freak ......lol philip |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Martie, a sweet read indeed thankU Coco |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
Martie, I wish I could find the secret you have found, so peaceful, and I read it in this poem. |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
What does really matter in the times of reflection one does to encase life as all that surrounds and all the gives brings not the visions we seek but rather cause us to seek that which we can only invision from mindsets born of misgivings in weak moments, tearful breakings, and the moments of joy that seem to fly so freely to some as a breeze is lifted only to catch that which we desire and rest it across life's little crossroads. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Martie~ 'when I’m sure that the ground will hold my big thinking, then, jump and shout, run and slide across the feeling, dig a hole, just so to plant joy, and then sit back and watch it grow but remember it will need tears, there is just no getting around that.' So ... that's where the joy comes from - perhaps I had forgotten. Well, I've cried the tears - so I'm looking for a great harvest ! I'm s t r e t c h i n g with you ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Marsha--I'm not sure...please tell me again...you have made me think maybe this poem isn't so bad after all. Philip--You are not a freak of any kind and yes, my words were floating around because that is just how I felt...maybe that's okay..if not..well, it just is. Coco--Thank you for the "sweet", sweet. Passing Shadows--I have no secret to peace, except to know that it is fleeting, so grab it if you see it. Mark--Now you gone and made me cry..your verse is meaningful to me...thank you, sweet cowboy. Marge--All I know is life seems to want to give you both...and I guess that the harvest is better if you can appreciate all the feeling that touches us to joy and tears...thanks sis! |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Martie, certainly I'll say it again, I love this poem. Not so bad, it's a real jewel, 24 carats, I love this. |
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Poertree Senior Member
since 1999-11-05
Posts 1359UK |
sheesh .......LOL...now i know what Brad feels like (i always wanted to be an ogre when i grew up ..heh). Perhaps i should elucidate: 1 I think this is a good poem in the sense that compared with 99% of the rubbish on the net it's totally excellent 2 It's not one of your best IMHO for the reasons i stated 3 (and most important) is it ok to write how you feel? ... geez ..it's more than ok of course ~smile~, and if 99 people think that what you wrote was great and one person has slight reservations then i guess that says something about the one person ..eh?....lol meantime martie - thanks again philip PS HEYYYY a real live discussion in Open ... |
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