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Passion's Response |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware 
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(Minor rewrite of a fantasy written last year) I am drenched Wet to the core Your words like humid heat Upon my mind and heart Visions of your love Your unabashed desire Matching mine so freely given Further fuel the raging fire Into a blast that matches Fatman or Little Boy's result Standing tall, Watching the seductive twinkle In your eyes Trembling, sweating, reaching Out to you As clasping fingers Merge hands tracing thighs' Sinews straining to desire Music strings Vibrating to passion's touch Heard in two hearts Now recumbent on the shore Toes teasing toes Hips meshed with hips Shadows in the full moon's Gentle light Roiling as a single shape Exchanging kisses Sparking flints on steel Steaming frothy waves Trying to cool The unquenchable pair Two voices clearing Different notes Create harmonics Above the reach of either Sung words subside to sighs Music of breaths Yielding to breaths Coruscating Like sparklers Desires are met, realized Zones redden, swell, flush Yield in symphonic notes Created by Full orchestras Playing a fevered score So the unresolved need Becomes fulfilled Ache falls prey To soaking rain Nourishing Two parched souls Two alien worlds Fall in orbit coinciding Dancing as music yields Wash through arroyos Waking dormant life Life erupts from cracked soil Strumming the pain with soft fingers Duet a balm bringing peace Whispered prayers that rose Heavenward Returned a bounteous reward It is your name Played it again And Again ~You have to have a dream so you can get up in the morning. ~ Billy Wilder |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Gee, Bill, stop beating around the bush and tell her how you feel!  This is romantic writing at its finest, sir... |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
Beauty is at its best when you pen words here.  My name isn't Baby, and I don't want to cyber. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Bill--This is so full of passion and longing..beautifully written and sensual...in other words...HOT! |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
YOWZERS...this is hot stuff.. quite a fantasy sir... now i think it will be all ours heres to making it come true.. powerful work .... you wrote it so that it builds up the intensity which is way cool take care jm |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Wonderfully written. You have a prolific and creative passionate pen, each poem is differently expressed. Just beautiful Liz |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
'deer- LOL - I DO love your subtlety - I think she's getting my message - my feeling are not purely intellectual - the good part is it is built on a great friendship Temptress- I'm glad you recognized how much I appreciate her in all her facets - Thank you Martie- When I am fantasizing - this kind of though almost always becomes a part of my dreaming - I'm so glad you liked it Thank you Janet M- Making it come true - may take a lifetime - but I find it so powerful - My efforts will never abate - I'm glad you like the way I wrote it. Thank you Liz- As love and passion have many facets - Writing to them in their infinite variety becomes easier - I can only hope she loves my words as much as I love her. ~You have to have a dream so you can get up in the morning. ~ Billy Wilder |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Why Mr. Yeats...did you have a very long weekend?... look forward to when you post...they're always quite "the read"... |
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Chanson Senior Member
since 2000-08-19
Posts 1559Up Creek w/Out Paddle |
A poem with music AND fireworks. It doesn't get any better than this Enjoyed the display, Wil.< !signature--> ...chanson~ Music, tonal clear & pure, Caresses the harshest of curves. -Song of Gesture [This message has been edited by chansondegeste (edited 09-25-2000).] |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
wow I echo all of the above, this is GREAT! what a way to express your feelings |
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Jenn E Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 589Kelowna, BC, Canada |
This was so intense and full of passion.....I found myself reading faster and faster just to get to the end of it. A very romatic write......and enjoyable read. Jenn E |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
Karilea- Actually - the weekend was filled with family - this was posted late at night with all asleep. ~S~ Thanks Chanson - it's good without fireworks too ~G~ - thank you Corazon- Yes sincere - only way to be - thank you Jenn E - (trying to imagine faster & faster ) ~G~ thanks ~You have to have a dream so you can get up in the morning. ~ Billy Wilder |
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Greeneyes  
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
oh dear lord, as I remember this....*g* wonderful write bill...*S* GE |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Sigh...I have so missed reading you...you know what your words do to this womans heart |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
Green Eyes - I'm sincerely flattered you remember - never see you online any more - are you always in privacy? Thanks ~S~ Paula - I'm glad My words please you ~WG~ |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
We shall just call you Mr. Bill the Commander of Hearts. Excellent penning once again sir. |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
Mark- OK - it is getting deep here - the roles will now reverse - the pot will call the kettle~S~ (thanks) |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
You have, with this poem, earned the title of Wilfred the Great. Excellent and passionate work. Keth. "It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures; but it is the loss that shapes the image, gathers the flowers weaves the garland."- |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
Kethry - I'm not certain I want any such titles bestowed - I played "king of the hill" on snow piles too many times as a kid growing up in Buffalo's winters. but - thank you just the same |
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Rosemary J. Gwaltney Senior Member
since 1999-08-26
Posts 997northern mountains, Idaho |
Excellent! I loved this one! |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
To recieve an 'excellent' from a PF poet of renown is high praise indeed thank you very much ~You have to have a dream so you can get up in the morning. ~ Billy Wilder |
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