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while time will stay |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida 
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while time will stay somewhere in the distant nearness he steps in. she feels him, and looks out toward his presence. he seeks her... in an instant they connect. the room shuffles around them making space suddenly available-- but not between them. she smiles, "its late... what are you doing here?" "i think i've grown accustomed to you," answers he. her smile broadens as she tries not to giggle like a school girl. he came just to meet her here, before sleep... she wonders, just where did he come from... and he, lest he forgets, needs to hear her voice, so surprises her with his-- but time does not lend itself for long; too soon they part with a quiet goodnite, and a kiss-- a dream. they are only in a dream... their hands just miss, but they continue to reach; puppets of loves great divide. and they continue on distant smiles-- while time will stay... -dgvarner 10-17-00 [This message has been edited by dgvarner (edited 10-17-2000).] |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Dee, love this is far, far too good, how am I supposed to say, "yes very nice piece" and then move on. Can't you just once, to give my superlatives a break, come up with something that's not stunning. No I know you couldn't it's like me being quite and restrained I suppose. Not in our natures, so which superlative do you want? Will any one do? In that case, I'll rummage around and see what I can find. Ahh here's one, this is quite simply indisputably brilliant! Take care kid Bubbles  |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Why is this so much like my life right now. I love the way you wrote this piece. I was there all the way.  Parker |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
oh MARSHA..i dont even know what that word means...haha!! but coming from you i'm gonna have to say thank you!! cause i'm sure it must be good...(but i'll chk my dictionary just in case LOL) PARKER.. so...youre saying, you identify?  thank you for your help in the unfolding of this poem glad you like.. hugs, dg |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
Dg~ really liked this poem. it told a story and the rhythm of it was right on cue. also liked the title take care. amy |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
dg- "their hands just miss, but they continue to reach; puppets of loves great divide and they continue on distant smiles- while time will stay..." i love it lots. such deep feeling in this one. keep reaching... btw...would that be like a 'mcnose' kind of puppet?? lol love ya bunches, -tricks "...until you have read the verse on his heart, you have not truely met the poet." -vlraynes |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
You have penned many beauties that I have read but this one shines above them all. I really enjoyed this one tremendously in not only it's wonderful flow but in the feeling I was left with after reading it. |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
AIMSTER..thank you--glad you enjoyed! do you find the title a bit of a tongue twister?? lol i do!  tricks..thank you for your two cents b4 i posted it was worth more than 2 cents to me keeping reaching mark..such kind words from you..i thank you so much!! hugs, dg < !signature--> my soul is painted like the wings of butterflies...fairytales of yesterday will grow but never die...i can fly--my friends -Queen [This message has been edited by dgvarner (edited 10-18-2000).] |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
dg- i just had to come back for another read...hope you don't mind. now i think i'll give others another chance to read this too. -vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, you have not truely met the poet." -vlraynes |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
tricks..certainly i dont mind thanks for the ride back to the top hugs, dg "after a while, you learn the subtle difference between holding a hand and chaining a soul..." -V A Shoffstall |
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