Open Poetry #10 |
Fractured Fairy Tale |
catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Distorted illusion of love meant to be turns into ashes of whats left of me. Smallest of pieces, remnants of hope dreams cracked in fragments, life's bitter joke. Droplets of passion, staining my cheeks flowing unchecked, no love to keep. |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Oh Sandra this is so sad. *Hugs* Don't you hate it when there are no happy ever afters. *HuGS* Kethry Growth demands a temporary surrender of security. Gail Sheehy |
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insect Senior Member
since 2000-04-22
Posts 1014 |
Wow! Excellent poem! I like the flow too! |
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Elizabeth
Moderator
Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
Yes Catalinamoon, that was really sad. Sometimes things really are just a fracture of what they could have been. Elizabeth Something sweet, something sort of grandish, sweeps my soul when thou art near... [email protected] |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
Enjoyed your couplets and words.. CatalinaMoon.. a sad ending but you can always add to it later and make it a happy ending...hopefully... ~Victoria~ A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
You write the feelings of your heart well...and they are sad...hugs! |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
WOW! Here I was expecting Rocky and Bullwinkle and was I wrong! Sandra, this is powerful.... |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Sandra my friend....{{{HUGS}}} to you and many heartfelt aches. The pain you feel is so evident and so powerful I can only remind you that the sun will shine in your heart once again. |
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Poet's Sister Member
since 2000-10-16
Posts 80North Carolina |
"Droplets of passion, staining my cheeks" Wow, what beautiful, sad imagery here. |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
The pain is so intense sometimes that it does seem that it has to be a joke. Such sad emotion so beautifully expressed. Great poem! sp Of all sad words of tongue or pen, the saddest are these: 'it might have been.' -John Greenleaf Whittier |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
This is a terrible feeling, beautifully written...Hugs... |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
this hurts my heart to read.......(((HUGS))) -SEA |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Thanks everyone, for all the kind thoughts, I am giving this one more day of misery, and it is going AWAY! Love to all Sandra/ cat... |
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