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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095
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The red hand sweeps away minutes over lonely roman figures that stand to attention encased in a fortress round and bold the outside lemon painted walls resemble sandy desert plains but this wall this floor holds whispers of "sadness madness" laughter and joy bodies twitch gums slap eye's dance doing the cha cha cha over the aroma of coffee brewing while golden piano favourites stirs in the background gently entranced I am seduced lulled into serenity as time goes by my eyes rise to the lonely time teller on the wall 12 Roman figures stand to attention still Angel of Darkness 15/10/2000 "If my words could blanket the skies and fill every corner and crevice of this earth, still this won't be enough" "Maree Russo" |
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Robert Joseph Member
since 2000-10-07
Posts 491South Carolina |
Dark Angel, enjoyable reading! You painted a picture, drew me into your words, and caused me to reflect on what you were saying. Very Good! Robert Joseph [This message has been edited by Robert Joseph (edited 10-15-2000).] |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
how those Roman figures rule our lives standing and looking over all looking knowing hearing wonderful Maree. . . just wonderful. . . ----------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Trew Member
since 2000-06-10
Posts 365Ottawa, Canada |
I've said it before... My favourite poems are literary snapshots. The kind that stop time for a moment and look a little closer. A wonderful example of this, Dark Angel, I'm glad I looked back and found this one! |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
I tell you, music is alive here at Passions, wonderful poem, Dark Angel, just great. Kathleen |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
RJ, thank you so much  Rule our lives, indeed they do! Thank you Sven Thank you Trew, I'm glad you like it Kathleen, thank you hon "If my words could blanket the skies and fill every corner and crevice of this earth, still this won't be enough" "Maree Russo" |
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Andrew Scott Member Elite
since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558Redlands,CA,USA |
An interesting picture of time captured solitude. I particularly like the way you describe the clock. Thanks for sharing. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Very descriptive writing of local and mood...James |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I know these slow nights well...I love your detailed flowing descriptions Dark Angel...you've a talent for bringing the reader with you into your mind...nice, nice work! |
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Poertree Senior Member
since 1999-11-05
Posts 1359UK |
Maree just caught this before i crash out! ..lol "The red hand sweeps away minutes" excellent excellent opening, nice to come back to later night night MP |
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
Glad I caught this one as well - not that I know anything about this...  C |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
great word play DA and you said you were the worst excuse for a poet on the forums this proves by far that yur not the worst. (ok you didnt say that and i love the poem and yur great yuh yuh yuh) |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Andrew, glad you liked and thanks for reading James thank you so much Serenity, thank you hon you pay me a lovely compliment hey MP Welcome back hon, missed you so much Thank you so much for reading and your lovely reply MM Thanks for stopping by and reading Chris Walty LOL, thanks buddy and you're great too yuh yuh yuh! "If my words could blanket the skies and fill every corner and crevice of this earth, still this won't be enough" "Maree Russo" |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Mmy, lately your work has incorporated a haunting quality into it that the melancholic in me adores... yet I hate to know you are sad also. Many warm hugs dearest AOL... and this poem is awesome - the imagery, the topic. You freeverser you....  K"He looked across the silky surface of the Severn... it was a famously difficult river with fierce tides..." From Jack Maggs |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Dark Angel, time took a backward step while I read this poem, which is great imagery. I can almost hear the clock ticking. Tick tock tick...click another minute passes. Be well Kethry Growth demands a temporary surrender of security. Gail Sheehy |
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