Open Poetry #10 |
of marathons and uncrossed hurdles |
Celeste McBride New Member
since 2000-09-24
Posts 3cape despair |
I left you breathless hopeless winded from a marathon that never ended I want you back from this story with no end God knows I would were the ending any different but I'm not supposed to or want to I'm supposed to play like an adult where no-one cries and no-one feels I want to cross these hurdles between us in limitless leaps of fearless faith and just remind you I love you and I always have |
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Ethan Halo Senior Member
since 2000-04-28
Posts 793on the roof again |
Welcome to Passions! a fantastic entrance. very Olympic-esque. i liked the words "limitless leaps of fearless faith". very eloquent and beautiful. also a nice promise of works to come. i hope you enjoy your stay here at Passions. the bellhop will arrive in a moment to check your bags! Everyone's got their demons. We all got somethin' to atone for. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Celeste~ Welcome to the Passion Suites ... (loved Ethan's welcome) These are very timely thoughts you've presented. Enjoyed the Olympic-related terms for sure. All in all ... enjoyed the entire poem. Very cleverly done. Look forward to more. Enjoy your stay ... and enjoy the fine talent here. LOTS and LOTS to read. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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chinaman Junior Member
since 2000-08-26
Posts 17 |
Strange but interesting way to go for the one you love!! |
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Celeste McBride New Member
since 2000-09-24
Posts 3cape despair |
hi thanks alot for your warm welcomes. I can't wait to see what this place has to offer. And as for my poem, I hope someday to win him back, I just don't know how. |
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Tennessee Angel Senior Member
since 2000-06-03
Posts 661Tennessee |
Great writing! The title really caught my eye and I'm glad it did. Welcome to Passions! |
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CMGrimm Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 685USA |
great entrance....welcome to Passions...your home away from home...(so to speak) We all truly hope you enjoy your time spent with us (as much as possible we hope..) take care chris Never be a carbon copy of anybody...make your own impressions. - ANON. |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Celeste, Welcome to passions, anything we can do to make your stay more comfortable, don't hesitate to ask. Room service will be available so you never have to leave your keyboard. btw excellent write. Be well Kethry "It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures; but it is the loss that shapes the image, gathers the flowers weaves the garland."- |
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BirdeeB Member
since 2000-09-16
Posts 106USA |
Welcome That was an amazing write. I hope too that you win him back..Good luck sweetie. BirdeeB |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
I want to cross these hurdles between us in limitless leaps of fearless faith and just remind you I love you and I always have I know that you can hurdle over all those obstacles if you want to and I will cheer you all the way. WELCOME TO PASSIONS and hope you stay around for a LONG LONG time. |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Celeste Welcome to Passions, where all women are safe from rascally scalawag men as long as they trust only me. I like the alliteration you used in this poem. It makes it flow smoothly along to the really great finish. You can trust the women, too. They are all very sweet and supportive. They've had a lot of practice because Toerag and Balladeer have left them swooning once too often. |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Hi Celeste, quite a nice poem, and I understand so well the need to reunite with someone you never stopped loving. Good luck. Sandra |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I particularly like the last verse... (Okay, so I am one of the swooners *G*) Welcome to Passions! |
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