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To Urania
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To Urania |
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Master Senior Member
since 1999-08-18
Posts 1867Boston, MA 
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Here, the hearts harden and feministic extremists Suck the life out of women, The earth germinates ashes and only your grimace Reminds me to cancel the date with the demon, Who has already set up the table For a short conversation and a one-sided transaction. But you’re here and I’m happy! I’m almost not able To conceal satisfaction... I’m laughing at crooked mirrors. The transparence Of life smiles back at me with pure fondness. Urania, behind the bushes, your parents Will never discern you in oneness With me,-- here on my planet. Believe me, I’ve been trying to ascend, but my feet Have grown into granite And only arching my back, can I see you. How sweet Is you voice! Especially when in silence, It rings with such power, such verve! Urania, sweep the stardust off your eyelids, Onto my palm, -- I’ll implant your offspring on Earth. But, now isn’t the time. It is Autumn and maple Leaves camouflage roads on which time skids with traction. But you’re here and I’m happy. I’m almost not able To conceal satisfaction... < !signature--> Check out my poetry here: http://cafepoetry.com/stage1/andrey_kneller.htm#My%20Hamlet [This message has been edited by Master (edited 10-15-2000).] |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
quote: great great great lines!!!! this whole piece is a magnificent work.... please take pride in this one... it is excellent in craftsmanship, emotion, and message.... THIS is poetry!!! thank you for the read. ~ all you can really ever expect out of life is a sincere apology and some decent poetry ~ |
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Master Senior Member
since 1999-08-18
Posts 1867Boston, MA |
Thank you Doreen, I'm glad you liked this one! |
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Master Senior Member
since 1999-08-18
Posts 1867Boston, MA |
Does this piece sound complete to you guys, or should I add more to it? Check out my poetry here: http://cafepoetry.com/stage1/andrey_kneller.htm#My%20Hamlet |
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Jhonbus Junior Member
since 2000-10-12
Posts 25Sheffield UK |
hmm, if you can, maybe. I sometimes want to add more to my poems but i never do. I can't seem to ever get back into the same mood, and in a way it seems to me like "destroying" the original poem...? |
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Master Senior Member
since 1999-08-18
Posts 1867Boston, MA |
I know what you mean, a lot of people tend to feel that editing destroys the original poem, but I change my poems all the time. And usually those that I change the most are the better ones. Thanks for responding. Check out my poetry here: http://cafepoetry.com/stage1/andrey_kneller.htm#My%20Hamlet |
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