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dgvarner
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since 2000-05-13

Posts 3552
High Springs, Florida

0 posted 2000-10-14 12:29 PM

hello love puppy,
she purred with a smile,
in a voice he could not hear.
and she wondered
what his mind's eye saw in her.
she couldve said she loved him
but she knew she couldnt know
for it was only in her hopes and dreams
that she allowed her heart
to love a stranger.
     a stranger...
she laughed at the irony--
as she felt she knew him better
than some of those she actually knew;
those she could actually touch--
   touch...
again she chuckled in her thoughts...
what a world we live in
where touch is far away,
yet hearts can meet
in the air of a mighty distance...
it was late into the darkness
when his response broke through her thoughts.
hello sweets,
he whispered,
in a voice she could not hear.
and perhaps he wondered too--
many things...
     many things...
as they sat together
in a reality
that kept them apart...

-dgvarner

she doesnt want the kind of love she can live with--she wants the kind she cant live without
-clint black

Elizabeth Cor
Senior Member

since 2000-10-13

Posts 879
Over the river and through the woods

1 posted 2000-10-14 02:16 AM

WOW! This is FABULOUS! SO many great lines...

yet hearts can meet
in the air of a mighty distance
~
it was late into the darkness
when his response broke through her thoughts
~
as they sat together
in a reality
that kept them apart

I love the rhythm this creates and defies. A refreshing, unique read. Thank you, Dgvarner.

tracie66
Member Elite

since 2000-01-18

Posts 4713
Australia

2 posted 2000-10-14 02:59 AM

d~
This is so superbly written...wonderful piece to read, very enjoyable

Tracie~

Love is the life of the soul...
It is the harmony of the universe

Marsha

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-10

Posts 7423
Maidstone Kent England

3 posted 2000-10-14 03:51 AM

Dee love, this is a WONDERFUL piece, have I not said over and over againg how talented you are. Proof of the pudding, is right here.
Your mam would be proud of you, and you should be too. Yes I know I don't have to say it, but say it I will, I really love this one. Bravos encore and thunderous applause.
Take care
Marsha

Parker
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since 2000-01-06

Posts 3129
ON

4 posted 2000-10-14 04:08 AM

Hello Sweets......

this has a surreal feel to it.... as if i'm looking at my own reality.

Parker

Jon Mewett
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since 2000-03-04

Posts 1304

5 posted 2000-10-14 06:34 AM

Deep and..........well I've said it before.........wonderful writing DG.....

Best Wishes

Jon

Elizabeth Santos
Member Rara Avis

since 1999-11-08

Posts 9269
Pennsylvania

6 posted 2000-10-14 09:24 AM

Very well written piece
Some really great lines
Liz

Irish Rose
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since 2000-04-06

Posts 10263

7 posted 2000-10-14 12:19 PM

Let us read more, this is very good

Kathleen

Mark Bohannan
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-21

Posts 7269
In the winds of Cherokee song

8 posted 2000-10-14 01:29 PM

I wanted so very much to pick my favorite line(s) in this one so just so you know...it wasn't easy but I finally mangaged...they are below in all the wonder that you penned in this piece.

hello love puppy,
she purred with a smile,
in a voice he could not hear.
and she wondered
what his mind's eye saw in her.
she couldve said she loved him
but she knew she couldnt know
for it was only in her hopes and dreams
that she allowed her heart
to love a stranger.
     a stranger...
she laughed at the irony--
as she felt she knew him better
than some of those she actually knew;
those she could actually touch--
   touch...
again she chuckled in her thoughts...
what a world we live in
where touch is far away,
yet hearts can meet
in the air of a mighty distance...
it was late into the darkness
when his response broke through her thoughts.
hello sweets,
he whispered,
in a voice she could not hear.
and perhaps he wondered too--
many things...
     many things...
as they sat together
in a reality
that kept them apart...

**YEAH so I did say it wasn't easy didn't I?

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

9 posted 2000-10-14 02:45 PM

that she allowed her heart
to love a stranger.
a stranger...
she laughed at the irony--
as she felt she knew him better
than some of those she actually knew;
those she could actually touch--
touch...
again she chuckled in her thoughts...
what a world we live in
where touch is far away,
yet hearts can meet
in the air of a mighty distance...
====================

yes.... yes... it is exactly like this...
you have captured it perfectly ...
and no... "they" arent strangers ..
they are simply "unseen" with our eyes ...
instead seen with our hearts ...
wonderfully done Dee
take care
jm

Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

10 posted 2000-10-14 02:52 PM

dgvarner,
Some wonderful lines enjoyed the read.

dgvarner
Member Elite

since 2000-05-13

Posts 3552
High Springs, Florida

11 posted 2000-10-14 04:46 PM

elizabeth..i thank you for that! wow..

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"Don't MAKE Me come down there." God

[This message has been edited by dgvarner (edited 10-14-2000).]

Nate Dogg
Senior Member

since 1999-11-15

Posts 1658
Georgia, Fulton

12 posted 2000-10-14 04:51 PM

I have to agree with everyone else, great lines and thanks for sharing!
Peace

Nathan

EagleOne
Member Elite

since 2000-03-07

Posts 2829
Between a laugh and a tear...

13 posted 2000-10-14 05:39 PM

A great read, I loved it!

"The heart and soul have no illusion of boundries when friendship is the quest"
~ My Angel.

dgvarner
Member Elite

since 2000-05-13

Posts 3552
High Springs, Florida

14 posted 2000-10-14 05:39 PM

TRACIE.. i thank you too!!

and MARSHA...you faithful reader!!

thank you in bunches too..

PARKER..ah parker..surreal is it...??

JON..a welcome visiter to my poetry..thank you!

ELIZABETH..IRISH ROSE..thank you so much for your very kind replies!!

MARK..heehee..youre so funny

i'm so glad you liked! much much appreciation!!

JANET MARIE.."instead seen with our hearts.." i like that..

glad you came to read me!

SEYMOUR and NATE DOGG..many thanks! glad you enjoyed the read

*sigh*..."you like me..you really like me"...heehee

hugs, dg

"Don't MAKE Me come down there." God

vlraynes
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-25

Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...

15 posted 2000-10-14 05:51 PM

dg-
   well...now that you're all caught up
   with your 'thank you's...it's my
   turn...lol.     do you hate me yet??

   anyway...i LOVE this.
   lots of reality in this one...and
   a kind of sadness too.  awesome write.

   love and hugs,
           -vicky



"...until you have read the verse on his
heart, you have not truely met the poet."
-vlraynes

dgvarner
Member Elite

since 2000-05-13

Posts 3552
High Springs, Florida

16 posted 2000-10-23 10:05 PM

eagle one..thank you much! glad you enjoyed the read

tricks..nah..never hate you

yes..lots of reality in this one

glad you enjoyed!

hugs, dg

my soul is painted like the wings of butterflies...fairytales of yesterday will grow but never die...i can fly--my friends -Queen

snowpants
Member Elite

since 2000-09-16

Posts 2061
KS

17 posted 2000-10-23 11:57 PM

'hello love puppy,
she purred with a smile,
in a voice he could not hear.

hello sweets,
he whispered,
in a voice she could not hear.'

Love those lines! Love the whole feel to the poem! Great read!!

sp

Of all sad words of tongue or pen, the saddest are these: 'it might have been.' -John Greenleaf Whittier

dgvarner
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since 2000-05-13

Posts 3552
High Springs, Florida

18 posted 2000-10-24 09:14 PM

thanks snow

i kinda like the feel of it too

thanks for reading!
hug, dg

"after a while, you learn the subtle difference between holding a hand and chaining a soul..." -V A Shoffstall

Ron K. Fox
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since 2000-10-24

Posts 925

19 posted 2000-10-24 09:24 PM

Took my breath away,
like climbing the summit of ones heart,
reaching out to grasp a cloud,
only to have it wisp through your fingers.
knowing all too well, we will all climb it again and again. Great work . Ron

Ron K. Fox
Senior Member

since 2000-10-24

Posts 925

20 posted 2000-10-24 09:25 PM

Took my breath away,
like climbing the summit of ones heart,
reaching out to grasp a cloud,
only to have it wisp through your fingers.
knowing all too well, we will all climb it again and again. Great work . Ron

kcsgrandma
Senior Member

since 2000-09-24

Posts 1522
Presque Isle, ME

21 posted 2000-10-25 12:13 PM

Hey, just popped over here looking for Vicky's poem, and here this was. It's really great. I agree it's impossible to pick out favorite lines. You've captured the thoughts and feelings of many here.

To love another person is to see the face of God.
- Les Miserables

Marilyn

dgvarner
Member Elite

since 2000-05-13

Posts 3552
High Springs, Florida

22 posted 2000-11-08 09:29 AM

ron and mar..i dont know how i missed you guys!

thanks ron, for the poetic reply

and mar, i'm glad you stumbled upon me

good to hear from you both

thanks!

hugs, dg

"i could hide out under there...i just made you say 'underwear'...i could leave but i'll just stay--all my stuff's here anyway..."

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