I want to follow beauty...

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Master
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since 1999-08-18

Posts 1867
Boston, MA

0 posted 2000-10-13 11:10 PM

“I want to follow beauty,” she exclaimed,
“And film its very essence as I walk.”
“I want to search for fire in the smoke,--
I want to be a poet,” he explained.

“I want to feel the Goosebumps on my spine.
I want to sense what others can’t conceive.”
And he replied, “I want to love and grieve,
And capture life in iambs of a line.”

And grasping, only now, what matters most,
They faced one, common enemy,-- the Time.
And in her ears, there ringed, enchanting rhyme,
And in his eyes, true beauty stood, exposed.

Check out my poetry here:

http://cafepoetry.com/stage1/andrey_kneller.htm#My%20Hamlet

MMoonchild
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since 2000-07-13

Posts 1715
PA

1 posted 2000-10-13 11:14 PM

I loved this, Master...a "thing" of beauty
~~soft smiles
Maureen

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Member Rara Avis

since 1999-06-15

Posts 7136
Mobile, AL

2 posted 2000-10-13 11:14 PM

Beautiful.

Elizabeth Cor
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since 2000-10-13

Posts 879
Over the river and through the woods

3 posted 2000-10-14 12:03 PM

You did a wonderful job with taking the last lines and connecting everything together. This was simple and moving.

Ethan Halo
Senior Member

since 2000-04-28

Posts 793
on the roof again

4 posted 2000-10-14 12:07 PM

absolutely magnificent! definitely a keeper. to the Library with it.

truly well penned. i loved the content AND the style. i've not seen one written like this before. well done, sir.

I am reminded of the immortal words of Socrates, who said, "I drank what?"

Master
Senior Member

since 1999-08-18

Posts 1867
Boston, MA

5 posted 2000-10-14 12:09 PM

Thanks guys, I'm glad you liked it.

Check out my poetry here:

http://cafepoetry.com/stage1/andrey_kneller.htm#My%20Hamlet

serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

6 posted 2000-10-14 04:22 PM

I enjoyed this much, Master. I liked the interplay of the dialogue, and the finding of commonality. Well done.

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

7 posted 2000-10-14 04:40 PM

"And in his eyes true beauty stood exposed."
I have seen the beauty come alive in women...funny how one day even though you have seen them many times you don't really notice them and then suddenly you cannot look away. James

Master
Senior Member

since 1999-08-18

Posts 1867
Boston, MA

8 posted 2000-10-14 07:06 PM

Serenity, thank you very much for your comments... I truly appreciate it!

James, I know exactly what you mean... Thanks for responding!

Check out my poetry here:

http://cafepoetry.com/stage1/andrey_kneller.htm#My%20Hamlet

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