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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
First a quick note...I'm writing an article on the 'darker side' of online romance/meeting/relationships. Now, I know first hand the 'up' side...my son met his wife in a chat room and they are happily married (never fight!). But there are people out there that take advantage of lonely people. That's what I'm writing about. Here is the link to the thread in the Alley, if you'd like to read and reply (or you can send any comments to me in private at my email address): /pip/Forum6/HTML/000340.html Here's one poem I wrote about this kind of relationship: My heart soars without hearing your voice I try holding back, but have no choice You won my soul with a passion's flame Because of you, I'll never be the same I smile as you approve my verse Deeper I sink into Cupid’s curse And though you think my words a game I continue to write them just the same. Gently chiding you beckon me ICQ messages set words free Fingers that dare to say the word The only one you've not yet heard Silence speaks a world of feeling Cursor blinks as my head is reeling Thoughts and words I’ll not repent This is love on the Internet And something a bit different: Alone, I lay in our bed each night hearing the click of the keys you hit knowing you found a fantasy love someone who ‘understands you’. I try to be what you want what you need but she seems to fulfill your dreams you never see her disheveled or tired never see her press your clothes never see her pick up your socks never see her sweaty from yard work never see her chase the kids around never see her at all she never asks you to clean the pool she never asks for food money she never tells you your mother called she never tells you the phone bill is too high she never asks if your dinner is ok she never asks to go out to a movie she never asks to do anything but just sits there waiting on line so if she is your true love I think you should find her just leave go on get out so I can find my own reality. [This message has been edited by Poet deVine (edited 10-12-2000).] |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Poet~ the first one is so sweet, I just love it........the second one made me want to cry. Definately a flip side there....loved them both.  -SEA |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
A toss of the coin and it can become to REAL too quickly if not seen for what it is. The sad part is as you say....when one is not as serious as the other and gets trampled on. IF you are going to play then you need to really know and live the rules. Strong points of message from you. Glad you put it up and I will be visiting the alley later....ohhh and yes....I did as you asked..thank you. |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Great pieces Sharon... Agreeing with Mark here. You certainly have to know what you are in for. - And that's the great problem isn't it? Sometimes you just can't K |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Sharon these are great! the first one is so beautiful and then when you read the second one, although beautiful it is so sad, makes you think. Great Job on both Maree "If my words could blanket the skies and fill every corner and crevice of this earth, still this won't be enough" "Maree Russo" |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I was right---and you ARE just like my dad---lol...AND THOSE TWO POEMS PROVE MY POINT... Thanks, Miss deVine---as always, for your discerning point of view...NOW GO HAVE FUN!!! |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Been there on the first... and would sure as hell hate to experience the second. *S* Both poems are great! |
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lucky Senior Member
since 2000-01-17
Posts 1601Idaho |
I was going to tell you to go to sleep... but when looking at the clock, I didn't know what time it was. It seems I'm always behind the times... darn it. dale |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Indeed - Both are true excerpts from the grand scale of life's relationships... You've depicted them well, my friend... as you invariably do..  |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Yes! I like this! Views from both sides of the coin. Anyone who has spent considerable time online has at least flirted with the temptation if not given into it. It can be dangerous, and heartbreaking. Corinne |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Thank you all for your kind replies.  |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Oh yes as they say...been there done that...have had my heart broke...because of the well not lies but because the fantasy was more what was wanted than the reality...will be visiting the alley and if ytou want any first hand knowledge feel free to ask. |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Sharon this is some great work here! That second one hits strongly! Strongly stated, and so true to life. You've portrayed both of them in great light. <*\\\>< I know not what the future holds, but I know Who holds the future. |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
was there, and done that either....feelings are awe. |
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natelan Junior Member
since 2000-10-06
Posts 34Escondido, CA, USA |
*bows* PDV- I met whom I know and believe whole heartidly to be my soulmate, on the internet only 4 months ago... Because of this, these poems touch me deeply; especially the first one... Both poems are lovely... Yet another example of your briliant writing. *bows* Nathan |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
ms. goddess devine...!! While I'm happy over your son's successful online/real life relationship for you and him and her.. I can't help but be concerned about the comment 'never fight' where there is passion there will be 'fights' and it's important for couples to learn how -- lol... they probably fight -- but they're just good at making up and not airing it out in front of you... never fighting just means -- not caring -- and.. too many of us have been there..  |
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Ariana Senior Member
since 2000-10-08
Posts 571Orlando, Florida |
I too know of many cases of happiness found on the internet. I also know of people that were severely hurt. You have told of life's wisdom in the two writings. I enjoy your work. Ariana |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Great work, deVine one. It's all the flip of a coin and if you keep your heads you won't get your tails in trouble |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Sharon... I look forward to your article... you know how I feel...you've had to help me delete posts due to a stalker... the problem comes in when someone gets too comfortable in the fact that the internet allows them anononymity .. SOME people just can not act with respect and responsiblity ... when they have the mask of being invisable... the idea in ther mind that they cant be held accountble for their actions... well... they think the internet is open season for them to spread their misery. both your poems are great examples.. and your second one is a view we dont often see or think about... there are MANY sides to this story.. again.. I look forward to your article. take care jm PS... thank you again for your help.. and concern and Ron too. |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Sharon- Both of these are very well done. You've done an excellent job of portraying these two very different points of view. Definitely food for thought. Thanks for sharing these. -vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, you have not truely met the poet." -vlraynes |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
These are both excellent expressions of what goes on. Very good, Sharon. Denise |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Sharon, I think I must be more cautious than others because I've only been in a chat room once. Didn't like it at all, best way I can describe it was saying hello about a million times. Definitely not for me, far too superficial, what sort of relationship can grow like that. I don't deal in lies or cheating, so because I'm always honest I expect others to be honest to me. Long distance relationships can work, but it has to be based on the real person. Sorry I've rambled a bit. But I enjoyed both these poems, because they are written well and beautifully expressed. Take care Marsha |
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Dee Member Elite
since 2000-08-19
Posts 2330Queensland, Australia |
I showed this to the person I mailed you about. I don't know if it helped put across my point of view, but, fingers crossed! Thanks for posting this, it will really hit home with quite a few, I'm sure. Dee |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
Several times I came inhere, doubing if I should tell my experience with this item. wrote a poem for one of my chatfriends, she was a victim of netlove, met him in real, and had a rough time. I will post it in a few minutes. name "letter to Silvie". Once I was to curious and I entered a adult chatroom, watching the room. and I saw that the most people only wanted friendship. and I made a lot of friends there. Most of my friends are searching for friendship in the first place, yes there are lot of people who don't search for that, but where I like to chat is friendship very important, and some of them end up in a wedding. and some of them end with broken hearts. and than is friendship very important, than you see how the people around are treating you, and take care about you. I have seen a lot, have many friends and had loss my heart once, and yes I had a broken heart. Now I only chat with friends, have learned my lesson. ok,now I'll take a deep breathe and push on the submit reply. |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
This brings to mind the incident that happened in my town a few years ago. I man (Manager of a local Burger King) found out his wife had an on line relationship and came home one night a murdered her (details too graphic to tell). I could never see the point to chat rooms. I'll just stick with my friends on passions. At least we're all sane Both poems were interesting and well written. A very timely subject. Am anxious to read your Alley post Liz |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
Yes, this is very informative, and it really all boils down to trust. Any form of communication and reaching out has it's dangers, even people who are introduced by a friend can turn out to be someone who can hurt, and I've experienced this firsthand. But if you stop reaching out, then everyone becomes a potential danger, and you might miss a measure of happiness and end up alone, with no one to talk with and that's sad. A person has to be careful. Kathleen |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
Great job Sharon!!!! Marina It is a blessing to have wings for words, and passion in pen Marina Crossley |
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