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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
You whisper to me through the lines of your poetry Soft and sensuous, full of the love we so want to share I can hear you speak the lines, I can see your face as you do And I want, oh I want so badly to come there to you To walk the sand beaches and lie in the soft meadow grass To taste the sea spray on your lips and see the clouds reflect in your eyes You whisper to me, in every line you write Telling me all the things we will do All the love we will share If only we can make it happen If only the day will come when all the obstacles are surpassed And the only thing between us is the very air we breath You whisper to me. Dedicated to the sweetest man I know |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Paula~ this is so sweet, tender and loving.....I really like this one.  -SEA |
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kitkat Senior Member
since 2000-01-11
Posts 878Nova Scotia |
*sighs* Paula this was lovely. -------------- You got to get up every morning with a smile on your face and show the world all the love in your heart Then people are gonna treat you better You're gonna find, yes you will That your beautiful as you feel.~~~ Carol King |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Very lovely dedication and I am sure he is whispering to you now. |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Paula~ What softly spoken words...truly beautiful Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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The Lonely Stranger Member
since 1999-06-18
Posts 361Upstate, NY, USA |
Paula, Though I read many poems here, I comment on less. I don't like to comment unless I honestly understand a poem. Often a poem is good and I simply don't get it. This is a wonderful poem that even a snook like "The Stranger" can understand. This one is deserving of a  to |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Paula* This is simply beautiful...so much love and promise can be held within the lines of weave...may all those dreams come true for you. Beautiful writing~ |
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Robert Joseph Member
since 2000-10-07
Posts 491South Carolina |
Paula Finn, your words share a desire and a hope, I'm sure many can ascribe to, nicely done. Robert Joseph |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
Paula..enjoyed your tender sweet poem... A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Sea...thank you my friend, I am glad you enjoyed it LOL Kitkat...thank you it was an emotional write for me. Mark...he is the truest friend I have Tracie...yes so very soft...whispered in fact...thank you The Lonely Stranger...yes I understand...its hard to make a comment when the meaning eludes you...I am glad you could understand this and I dont think you are a "snook"...thank you for the heart to heart Holly...well dreams are what you make them...cant seem to give up on that dream so I go on searching... Robert Joseph...well if even one person sees themselves in what I write then thats one person I have touched...thank you |
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Cerenity Member Elite
since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637Escondido-California |
Hi Paula, This is a beauty, very much enjoyed. Love, Cerenity "God doesn't have to be reminded that we exist. We have to be reminded that He exist!" (Writer Unknown) |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
"And the only thing between us is the very air we breathe." Paula this is sensational...lots of feelings and life within your soft words...James |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
this is so sweet, tender and so much of love. true love, is coming through. loved it. Charisma |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Victoria...you slipped in there when I wasnt looking...thank you Cerenity...thank you sweet friend James...yes you always find the line that means the most to me...thank you friend Charisma...thank you...love for a friend so tender and true...he knows who he is |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Paula I Love this sweet poem you have written... more than yesterday and less than tomorrow. James |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Paula~ Your heart whispers real puuuurrrrty in this one. Velvety-smooth. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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ma miller Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 806 |
Paula ... your way with a thought always sends a journey's start ... nice |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
This one simply glows! "The heart and soul have no illusion of boundries when friendship is the quest" ~ My Angel. |
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Daniel J D Senior Member
since 2000-10-01
Posts 1471Hillcrest, Queensland, Australia |
I agree, this is definitely true love shining through. So well done. |
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Ethan Halo Senior Member
since 2000-04-28
Posts 793on the roof again |
what a beautiful dedication! i like the lines about the beach and the meadow. it must be nice to share such a beautiful common interest! whoever this guy is, he is a lucky one! great poem. i also liked the flow on this one. I am reminded of the immortal words of Socrates, who said, "I drank what?" |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
oooooooh I like the way you whisper... sensual and sweet poem ... love the anticipation in this go for it girlie  jm |
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Elizabeth Cor Senior Member
since 2000-10-13
Posts 879Over the river and through the woods |
What a wonderful man he must be to have inspired this! Paula this is lovely and so very sweet. |
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insect Senior Member
since 2000-04-22
Posts 1014 |
For you You breathe my soft voice Uncontrollably with no choice As tingles travel down your spine Your heart beats to mine Faster when our lips touch together A voice of love soft as a feather Tickling your ears so sweetly A body language talking deeply  Shhhhhh!!!Love your poem |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
A tender poem, beautiful thoughts. "an afixiation a fix on anything the line of life the limb of a tree the hands of he and the promise that s/he is blessed among women". Patti Smith |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
James...you honor me with not one but two visits thank you. Lady Marge...so glad you like it. Mark...your presence is always an honor and a pleasure...thank you EagleOne...thank you my friend...so glad you dropped by Daniel J D...I am glad it reads like that for you. Ethan...Its a privilege to have you here thanks. JM...lol girl...anticipation is the best part of the game. Elizabeth...He is a very special man. Insect...how truly lovely is your reply...its soft refrain just makes me sigh...this hidden languge that you speak...it makes my knees grow so weak...so quietly now I do listen...as on my lips your soft kiss glistens...thank you. Brian...thank you sir |
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Trew Member
since 2000-06-10
Posts 365Ottawa, Canada |
Paula, I don't know who gave you permission to construct a pipeline to my pleasure centre, but consider the fuel delivered. This one made me tingle! "Taste the sea spray on your lips" Man! What an image! Filled with love and desire... excellent! |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Trev...well you did didnt you love? Thanks you ALWAYS make me feel good [This message has been edited by Paula Finn (edited 10-16-2000).] |
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Ariana Senior Member
since 2000-10-08
Posts 571Orlando, Florida |
Paula Oh such beauty in your pen. Hang on to him and love him with all of your heart. Ariana |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
Hi Paula, That everyone could hear those whispers, my friend. Hi there...long time, no see. I'm glad to know that you're still writing. The mages in this poem are so lovely...just so nice.Paula, please e-mail sometime. I'd love to hear from you, dear friend. I've missed you. Michael Proust- "Love is space and time measured by the heart" |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
This whispers so beautifully of love So tenderly of yearning So graciously of respect Liz |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Ariana...it is my intention that he never slip away...he is my best friend Michael...what an honour to have you here my friend...you have been sorely missed...I am happy that you like this one its very special. Elizabeth...he has all the love and respect I have to give...and yes I yearn for him every day...he is my dearest friend |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Ariana...it is my intention that he never slip away...he is my best friend Michael...what an honour to have you here my friend...you have been sorely missed...I am happy that you like this one its very special. Elizabeth...he has all the love and respect I have to give...and yes I yearn for him every day...he is my dearest friend |
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