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Open Poetry #10

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Temptress

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Member Rara Avis

since 1999-06-15

Posts 7136
Mobile, AL

0 posted 2000-10-11 11:01 PM

Fetching summer eyes,
Mourn the passing warmth,
As a wintered heart,
Steals the breath,
Of a slightly worn girl.
This is remembrance of her,
Going with the tides,
Of expansive sky oceans,
Dancing on crested wind,
And frothily drifting clouds.
Once a discreet portrait of innocence,
And wildflower boquets.
A perfect measure of knowing,
Escaping landscape brown eyes,
In unguarded moments,
When shyness was no more her captive.

My name isn't Baby, and I don't want to cyber.

insect
Senior Member

since 2000-04-22

Posts 1014

1 posted 2000-10-11 11:25 PM

Cool poem!
A warm front may come your way!

Temptress

Moderator

Member Rara Avis

since 1999-06-15

Posts 7136
Mobile, AL

2 posted 2000-10-11 11:54 PM

Thank you.

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

3 posted 2000-10-12 09:14 AM

This feels world weary and regretful... but those unguarded moments say hope is still there... I like it!

Robert Joseph
Member

since 2000-10-07

Posts 491
South Carolina

4 posted 2000-10-12 09:43 AM

In unguarded moments,
When shyness was no more her captive

Temptress, I enjoyed the sense of birthing freedom this piece delivered, and the closing lines stood out on their own.

Robert Joseph

Mark Bohannan
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-21

Posts 7269
In the winds of Cherokee song

5 posted 2000-10-12 09:47 AM

This is remembrance of her,
Going with the tides,
Of expansive sky oceans,
Dancing on crested wind,
And frothily drifting clouds.
Once a discreet portrait of innocence,
And wildflower boquets.
A perfect measure of knowing,
Escaping landscape brown eyes,
In unguarded moments,
When shyness was no more her captive.

**These are really beautiful lines. The whole thing was actually but these just sort of leaped out to me. btw...like your signature.

Paula Finn
Member Ascendant

since 2000-06-17

Posts 5546
missouri

6 posted 2000-10-12 10:09 AM

Very nciely done...wonderful flow and such thoughts

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