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Adam in Disguise when compared to Doreen Peri
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Adam in Disguise when compared to Doreen Peri |
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Wobbly Head Bob Member
since 2000-05-15
Posts 299Virginia, USA |
I want to compare and tell you I'm there Anna doesn't have a clue About the likes of me or you Serious and strict editing Ha! I laugh out loud If only it were possible To repiece what you've done now! By that I mean my head does spin A thousand times to write it down But you finally figured out how to begin People perched in perfect houses Wifes and husbands percect spouses Blech! June and Ward only had those things All I've got are stupid silly ramblings Of nothing and all that I can recall My life and its ways downs and dismays And I tell you its true That I am flesh and bone living off of semi-conducting silicon But I'm a liar and admittedly so Scared confused oh leave me just go I look around me and am I the only one Whos got his act in shambles Am I really the only one!? I can't compare myself to anything at all I'm lonely and I'm boring and I'm stuck upon the wall Car insurance, late rent, late bills overdue for inspection I'm definately void of thrills my tap tap tapping is gone with the wind You can be sure I won't be caught up in that again This whole thing, my life, my love, my sorrow, my strife, my woe, I have no inclination for tomorrow Oh eve in disguise, though yours was much better These are not lies, just a return for your letter Wanted to tell you my heart felt for you And I guess there's always someone on the other side of you Through whatever religion you cast I felt that we ate from the same apple of past. **Doreen Peri, you are simply the best** |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
thank you, sweet person... i'm glad you understood but then again, i'm not glad and i wish you the best out of it  this poem is very special... thank you |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
This was a good thought compared to Doreen's. I enjoyed this one also. |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
An interesting poem, well written and fitting tribute to Doreen who has tempted us all with the sweet apple that it her poetry. "an afixiation a fix on anything the line of life the limb of a tree the hands of he and the promise that s/he is blessed among women". Patti Smith |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
WHB, well done! Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?...KRJ |
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