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Justbleu
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0 posted 2000-10-10 01:33 PM


Transfixed in the dynamics
Creased against the paradox
Of a mind lost in visions
Through the cycles of confusion
Deep thunder calling erratically
As it lies near the stream
Echoeing softly against all sight
Side by side conspicuous
Rocking through boundries
Constant struggles to bind
Instance froze in a mirror
Parallel to the rising tides
Thrashing through the hallows
Waves of composure deepening
Flashing colors across daylight
Inside whispers flourishing
Counting twice at awakening
Willowing breathless twofold
Delightfully hidden from view


"Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again. To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown

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Sven
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1 posted 2000-10-10 07:16 PM


Wonderful. . .

The things that bring us together. . .

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That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl


Seymour Tabin
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Tamarac Fla
2 posted 2000-10-10 08:31 PM


Justbleu,
Much too heavy for so pretty a face. You have an active mind.

Justbleu
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3 posted 2000-10-12 01:23 AM


Thank You Sven!!  

Hmm...an active mind!! Thanks SY!!  


"Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again. To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown

Mark Bohannan
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In the winds of Cherokee song
4 posted 2000-10-12 04:54 AM


Rest not the mind for fear of losing the visions of the paths we walk.  Superb verse in content and flow.
tracie66
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5 posted 2000-10-12 05:50 AM


Well written piece Justbleu, I agree with all the fine poets above me  
Tracie~


Love is the life of the soul...
It is the harmony of the universe



Justbleu
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6 posted 2000-10-14 12:09 PM


Well said Mark...I like the quote and Thank You as always!!  

Tracie Thank You too!!!  


"Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again. To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown

Elizabeth Cor
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Over the river and through the woods
7 posted 2000-10-14 12:16 PM


Wonderful flow... the ending sent all sorts of pictures flitting into my head   .
WhtDove
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8 posted 2000-10-14 11:43 PM


Well written, but does seem heavy. I hope you're ok??  It is great to see you back among us  

<*\\\><

I know not what the future holds,
but I know Who holds the future.

Justbleu
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9 posted 2000-10-31 09:55 PM


Thanks Elizabeth!!!  

Whtdove Thank You and HUGS....I'm ok!!  


"Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again. To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown


Alwye
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In the space between moments
10 posted 2000-10-31 10:07 PM


Exellent, powerful words here Justbleu!  

*Krista Knutson*

"One can never consent to creep when one feels an impulse to soar."
Helen Keller


catalinamoon
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The Shores of Alone
11 posted 2000-10-31 10:48 PM


Whew, a very interesting ride through that poem.
Great!
Sandra

Justbleu
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12 posted 2000-11-02 01:09 PM


Alwye Thank You....I'd have to agree with that one!!!  

Thank You Catalinamoon...I'm glad you found your ride interesting!!!  

I still am not quite sure what I was writing about here or what this piece means to me!!  It's a strange one even to me!!  


"Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again. To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown


ethome
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13 posted 2000-11-03 05:34 PM


You're carrying a heavy one here but it is well done delivery...very good!!
brian madden
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ireland
14 posted 2000-11-04 11:34 AM


Excellent poem great lines... loved this.  

"an afixiation a fix on anything the line of life the limb of a tree
the hands of he and the promise that s/he is blessed among women".
Patti Smith

EagleOne
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Between a laugh and a tear...
15 posted 2000-11-05 02:20 AM


There is something about this one that keeps drawing me back. This conveys a powerful, yet unsettling feeling to me. I do hope all is well, take care!

"The heart and soul have no illusion of boundries when friendship is the quest"
~ My Angel.

Justbleu
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16 posted 2000-11-21 12:55 PM


Hey all of you thank you soo much!!  I am hanging in there through lifes highs and lows!!!  

"Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again. To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown


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