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Epitaph (In response to the I Am challenge)
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Epitaph (In response to the I Am challenge) |
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hsystems Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 319Murray, UT, USA |
Author's Note: This is actually a poem that I wrote a few years ago. It doesn't follow the rules of the "I Am" challenge - I will write one to follow the rules later on. But, the "I Am" challenge brought it to mind. Epitaph Read me The story of my life My hopes and dreams My doubts and fears Inscribed on parchment Which shall endure no longer Than my mortal body Hear me The quiet whisper Of a frustrated man Who dreamed of greatness But achieved only mediocrity And who utterly failed To make the world a better place See me The inner me The beauty and goodness Locked deep within my heart Struggling to break free Always searching, but never finding The way to shine forth Remember me And the times that we shared The smiles and laughter The sorrow and tears And know, always That even though I accomplished little I always tried -Troy J. Hoecherl- © Troy J Hoecherl All Rights Reserved < !signature--> Beautiful, Thought-Provoking Poetry http://www.h-systems.net/p1.htm [This message has been edited by hsystems (edited 05-01-2000).] |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
WOW!!! Troy , this says it all. Great work. All my love, Jeffrey I lie awake in a world filled with dreams, but dreams can be so real when you don't know you're asleep |
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Alicat Member Elite
since 1999-05-23
Posts 4094Coastal Texas |
Whoa...very deep. Man, can't wait to see how you answer the challenge.... Alicat |
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DestinysCharm Member
since 2000-04-28
Posts 90 |
Your poem is written so well and dives so deep into your soul. Sometimes we don't realize the impact we have on others and we go on in life thinking we accomplished not near as much as we wished we could have, when actually we may have done lots more without even knowing. I bet this is true with you.  |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
I'm sure your words will long after you are gone, Troy. Also, you do shine! This is a wonderful heartfelt piece you have written here! Denise |
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netswan Senior Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 1369Washington |
Troy ----this is touching -- and deep. You are not mediocre ----You will live on long after you have decided to leave this world ------on the lips of many a poet, on your children's and their children's and on your grave stone ------You have made a difference -- And will continue to do so --------greatness comes from inside ------------and you have one of the biggest hearts that I know. You have made a difference in my life. hugs from netswan |
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hsystems Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 319Murray, UT, USA |
Thank you all for your kind responses! Jeffrey - thanks, buddy! I love you man, LOL! Alicat - thank you! I'm working on my poem for the challenge, right now - hope to have it done today.  DestinysCharm - thanks so much for the encouragement! If I can touch others the way that I have been touched and blessed by all the other poets here, I will feel that I have accomplished something wonderful, indeed! Denise - thank you for your kind thoughts! I think that at the least, I'll live on through my daughter, and the lullabye that I wrote - which I sing her to sleep with. Teresa - WOW! Thanks, that means a lot to me! I hope you know how precious your friendship is to me, my dear friend! From one big heart to another, here's a {{{HUG}}} back! Again, thank you all for your wonderful comments! Troy Beautiful, Thought-Provoking Poetry http://www.h-systems.net/p1.htm |
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David2 Member
since 2000-03-22
Posts 407 |
Troy, You have touched on almost universal emotions and so very well! Again I enjoyed your work imensely, you're the best. keep posting. David |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Wow.....this is great, my friend. You are a fabulous and loving person, don't you ever for get that. You have helped me more than i could ever tell you!!!! Thank you, my friend!!!!! Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end. --Michael W. Smith |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
Fret not, my friend if all your poems are as good as this one is, rest assured that the world is made a better place by you leaving your poetic trails behind  most heart-wrenchingly honest...I enjoyed |
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