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Marge Tindal
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0 posted 2000-04-30 07:03 PM


An Ocean Of Emotion
~*Marge Tindal*~


The shattered heart made a distant crying
Large tears tumbled over others sighing
Giving release to hearts forevermore
That crying never did to hearts before

The stars hung low and boding in the night
Like bulbs grown dim in the shame of eyes might
You could never tell that tears cascading
In an ocean of emotion would be wading

The tear in falling touched a heartfelt sigh
It looked as if a tear of sad goodbye
Was prepared to fall amid teary emotion
Someone had lost all tender devotion

There would be more than just a teardrops demise
Before the last teardrop fell from lovers eyes




 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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DiObear
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1 posted 2000-04-30 07:17 PM


Marge,

Seems like you also know the value of tears.  I especially liked the line "Large tears tumbled over others sighing".  

Sue



 

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2 posted 2000-04-30 07:21 PM


good one Marge....still going strong
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3 posted 2000-04-30 08:45 PM


Di0bear~
Yep .. don't we all?
I just know you're going to enjoy our forums.
It's a nice place to be.

RobertB~
Yes, not sure how 'strong' ..
but still 'going'.
Seriously, you don't come here often enough.
I enjoy reading you.
Love ya'
~*Marge*~



 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Denise
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4 posted 2000-04-30 08:47 PM


You've captured heartbreak well in this, Marge. Very well done!

Denise

cutie2005
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5 posted 2000-04-30 08:51 PM


this poem was so sweet loved it!!!!
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6 posted 2000-04-30 08:56 PM


This poem is cool, very E.A. Poe-ish!
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Denise~
Thank you for that.
It was my intention and to know I did it well, pleases me.

Cutie~
Thank you, hon.

Tuck~
My goodness, thank you very much.
I think you just made my night !
~*Marge*~



 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Irish Rose
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8 posted 2000-04-30 10:04 PM


Oh, Marge, such an open heart. The words. and the image so real.
it was exquisitely poetic.

 Kathleen
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9 posted 2000-04-30 10:12 PM


WOW..Margie-girl...
this is so well written...
its perfect..one of my favs of yours
and in my humble opinion..
one of your best!!!
so much emotion.
excellent.


 ~as always, Take Care,JM~
--------------
I know it's been a long road
To get these towns behind me and I
Will gladly reap what we may sow--
I am there for you ...
and you're there for me ...
Are you waiting for
Heart in hand
Woman and man
See me where I stand I am
Heart
Heart in hand
~vertical horizon~


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10 posted 2000-04-30 10:33 PM


Marge, this poem touched me very deeply. I especally liked the line

"There would be more than just a teardrops demise
Before the last teardrop fell from lovers eyes"

Great job

 "We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde

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Kathleen~
Thank you ... it caught me by surprise and just fell to the page.  I'm so pleased you liked it.

JanetMarie~
Thank you so much.  I think I'm gonna like it a whole lot too.  I appreciate your comments.

LoveBug~
I am always pleased to hear what you think of what I've written ... thank you.
Love ya'
~*Marge*~


 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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12 posted 2000-04-30 11:58 PM


Oh my...I'm feeling a bit of deja vu here hun...you know how to paint the picture!! *sniff sniff* I know it's just as hurtful on both sides, even though it may not seem that way...this was beautiful Marge...I won't give you anymore prissy comments, K? lol

Love you
~D


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13 posted 2000-05-01 12:07 PM


Devina~
Thank you, sweetie.
I knew that you would 'feel' this one.

And you can do that 'prissy' thing with me
anytime ... actually, it describes me to a tee. (probably the word most used by my friends and family to describe me) LOL !
Love ya'
*HUGS*
~*Marge*~



 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Martie
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14 posted 2000-05-01 12:55 PM


Tears are a part of life, and sometimes a wonderful release...I really liked this poem of yours, sweet Marge.
serenity blaze
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15 posted 2000-05-01 01:00 AM


Ocean of Emotion--Tidal wave of tears...loved this 'mom'...
JamesMichael
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16 posted 2000-05-01 05:05 AM


Lovely Marge...liked the title too..sometimes there is nothing left except the crying...remember the song raindrops keep falling from my head.  It was a beautiful song about crying.  James
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17 posted 2000-05-01 07:41 AM


Martie~
Yeah, hon ... a wonderful release, indeed.
*HUGS*, my friend.
~*Marge*~


 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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18 posted 2000-05-01 07:43 AM


Well ... pretty obvious I haven't had my second cup of coffee !!!!  

Just got in a hurry .....
Serenity~
Thanks, hon.  I appreciate the comments.

James~
You're a sweetie.
Yes, that is a lovely song.
Thank you for your replies, always.
~*Marge*~


 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com


tracie66
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19 posted 2000-05-01 08:03 AM


Marge my sweet friend, yes when the heart is broken the tears do tumble. Sad poem Marge but still lovley  
Tracie~


 Love is the life of the soul...
It is the harmony of the universe



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20 posted 2000-05-01 08:15 AM


The image of a shattered heart crying was wonderful. What a great starting line.What emtoion and sadness. As always I enjoyed reading your poem  

 "Love is the only drug you can take that will convince you each time
that you've never had it before."
~author unknown~



ESP
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21 posted 2000-05-01 08:25 AM


I never knew heartbreak could be so beautiful!! I guess you can make anything seem beautiful though, right Marge?

Love and hugs,
Lizzie


 "Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight."

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22 posted 2000-05-01 11:42 AM


Tracie~
Thanks, hon.
So pleased you enjoyed.

Tess~
Oh, thank you so much.

ESP~
Hon, yes, there is much sadness in heartbreak ..
but there is beauty in all emotions.
Maybe that's what came through to you.
Thank you.
~*Marge*~


 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Kit McCallum
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23 posted 2000-05-02 06:42 AM


This is wonderful Marge ... you've eloquently captured the life of a teardrop before it hits the cold hard floor.  Beautiful!  This "is" addictive ...

/Kit McCallum

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24 posted 2000-06-15 01:04 PM


Kit~
Taking a stroll through the days-gone-by ...
found your reply to this ....
thank you so much.
~*Marge*~



 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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