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Open Poetry #7

I sing

7
Member

since 2000-04-26

Posts 113
Amherst, MA, USA

0 posted 2000-04-30 03:31 PM

I sing

I sing wind
free strong wind
power to fly
swallow the sky
carry pain away
(for it's not mine)

I sing fire
honest passionate fire
power to ignite
bring all to light
burn past away
(for it's not mine)

I sing water
smooth flowing water
power to float
fast or slow
drown brain away
(for it's not mine)

I never sing earth
dead, dreamless earth
power to freeze
the wind in its trees
silence my song
(for it's mine)

Actually, I have a revision of this, one that's more rhythmic, but I can't find it now. I'll post it later, if you want.

-7

[This message has been edited by 7 (edited 04-30-2000).]

ESP
Member Elite

since 2000-01-25

Posts 2556
Floating gently on a cloud....

1 posted 2000-04-30 03:41 PM

I think this one is pretty good but if you have one you made even better, please do post it!!

Love and hugs,
Lizzie

"Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight."

Poet deVine

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Member Seraphic

since 1999-05-26

Posts 22612
Hurricane Alley

2 posted 2000-04-30 05:02 PM

Excellent. Is the revision a change in the meaning of the poem?

vandana

Member Patricius

since 1999-10-22

Posts 10463
USA

3 posted 2000-04-30 06:01 PM

I liked it a lot!!!!!.Welcome to passion.!!!!!!

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