Open Poetry #7 |
Broken Promises |
SilverTongue New Member
since 2000-04-18
Posts 8 |
Ok, this is my first poem on here, so PLEASE bear with me. BRIEF history of poem:I wrote it on an airplane napkin right after breaking up with my boyfriend on our 1 year anivversary. NOW to the poem: Broken Promises You gave me your word, I gave you my heart, Now I don't know Where to start. Remember when we met For the first? And how we kissed, Eyes closed, lips pursed? Now all I have Is a shattered heart, My love of life (but only part) And an unforgivable broken promise, That somehow reminds me Of our last kiss |
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netswan Senior Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 1369Washington |
Hi SilverTongue welcome to the Forum. I am fairly new here myself -- I think that his posting is great - it is smooth from start to finish -- and I like the way you have the first kiss and ending it with the last kiss. Well, done. PS. Hearts do heal, you know! netswan |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
SilverTongue~ Welcome to Passion's. Very well done. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Jamie Dawg Junior Member
since 2000-03-25
Posts 35 |
New here also....or at least still feel like it! Anyways...your nerves were not valid...this is so keeping it real...the feelings are so clear and raw! |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Silvertongue, first let me say welcome to passions, you will love it here. I am truly sorry to hear of such a loss, your poem is bittersweet and very well expressed. I am sure that almost everyone who reads your poem will relate to your words. I wish you love in the future and hope that you will no longer be haunted of the "last kiss" Take care, Melissa Honeybee |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Welcome to passions...I hope your heart is well on the way to healing |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
Broken promises and shattered hearts are abundant here ... they account for a good percentage of the reading ... so most people can relate to your situation Welcome to Passions Rex}>{{{{o> |
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