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Battle Field |
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Lone Ranger Member
since 2000-04-16
Posts 92Salvador , Bahia , Brazil |
Fixed eyes, silenced Voices Bodies in rigid attention Soldiers prepared to follow me in combat Battle lines are traced by my hands Positions taken Defined Formations Under my command A discipline veil Is what separates us from complete hysteria Each one of us knows That the order of our arrays Shortly will give place To the desperate screams of mouths Flowing blood Swords and axes will cut men to the middle But, at this time, we faced An enemy still more insidious and cruel The Silence "Only in the dreams , is that man can truly be free It was always thus and always thus will be" Prof. Keating Dead Poets Society |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
whew!! sharp,and vivid imagery here... well written!! I like your signature quote too  ~as always, Take Care,JM~ -------------- I know it's been a long road To get these towns behind me and I Will gladly reap what we may sow-- I am there for you ... and you're there for me ... Are you waiting for Heart in hand Woman and man See me where I stand I am Heart Heart in hand ~vertical horizon~ |
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Lone Ranger Member
since 2000-04-16
Posts 92Salvador , Bahia , Brazil |
JM , thanks for the reply , and , glad you liked my signature it is my life's theme... "Only in the dreams , is that man can truly be free It was always thus and always thus will be" Prof. Keating Dead Poets Society |
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netswan Senior Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 1369Washington |
Whoa Lone Ranger, how did this one get missed. This is really good. netswan |
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jbouder Member Elite
since 1999-09-18
Posts 2534Whole Sort Of Genl Mish Mash |
LR: I liked this and look forward to the sequel (there BETTER be a sequel ... but please don't pull a Robert Jordan "Wheel of Time" thing on us ... pleeeeeaaaaase!!!). I am serious about my liking it and about looking forward to the sequel. Thanks.Jim |
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Lone Ranger Member
since 2000-04-16
Posts 92Salvador , Bahia , Brazil |
Thank you netswan and Jbouder! And... a sequel , well I never thought about that, I made this poem months ago , but it doesn't seem a bad idea at all... Maybe tomorrow... "Only in the dreams , is that man can truly be free It was always thus and always thus will be" Prof. Keating Dead Poets Society |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
Brilliantly done the silence is utter murder to the nerves Rex}>{{{{o> |
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Lone Ranger Member
since 2000-04-16
Posts 92Salvador , Bahia , Brazil |
Thank you Rex , and you're dawn right Silence SOMETIMES can be killing... "Only in the dreams , is that man can truly be free It was always thus and always thus will be" Prof. Keating Dead Poets Society |
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