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Carly Maas
Junior Member

since 2000-04-21

Posts 23
Garden City, MI, USA

0 posted 2000-04-29 09:22 PM

With You

I came here today for one reason,
To tell you how I feel about you.

I feel that you are the only person for me,
That we were put on this Earth for one reason,
To be together.

I feel that I can't live without you,
You fill my every thought,
I can't think in school,
I can barely sleep at night,
Because I'm thinking about you.

When I sit alone in my room,
I think of how great it would be if you and me were together,
I think about how great YOU are,
And the things you and I could do.

I think of my life and the things I want to do,
But the only thing I want is to be with you.
I want to be inside of you,
I want to know what you're thinking,
I want to feel you,
And I want you to feel me too.

I want you to feel what I feel,
So you know what it feels like to be living with a broken heart,
So you know just exactly how I feel about you,
Because I know that we can't be together,
And that breaks my heart.

kitkat
Senior Member

since 2000-01-11

Posts 878
Nova Scotia

1 posted 2000-04-29 10:21 PM

Wow this was great. The ending surprised. It was sad.

netswan
Senior Member

since 2000-03-28

Posts 1369
Washington

2 posted 2000-04-30 01:21 AM

Carly, so sweet and so sad --
Well written poem with a twist on the
end.
Clever.

Keep writing -- that is where I find
a lot of my solace in life.
Time does heal these things -- I know
it is hard to believe, but it just does.

netswan

Sven

Member Laureate

since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

3 posted 2000-04-30 01:31 AM

Carly,
I really liked this poem. . . the ending was quite a surprise. . . I could feel the longing. . .

Excellent my friend. . .

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That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl

Cerenity
Member Elite

since 2000-02-16

Posts 2637
Escondido-California

4 posted 2000-05-01 05:08 PM

Hi Carly,

This is a sad position to be in I know, time seems to be the only answer that I know of.
Passions is a great place to be when the heart needs mending, you will find no other place on earth like it. Wonderful work here my dear, I look forward to more.

Cerenity

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