Open Poetry #7 |
I wait |
Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
I wait The source of my dreams are wings of extremes. That stream and thrust like the dust in light beams. The substance and contents are full of implore With the light of the sun and red of amour. And it takes me on an emotional ride. Where soul is the goal and love is the guide. Winding me over a rainbow swift flow Winging on the wings of a placebo. The passage is vibrant in color and hue, And the air is full of the warmth of you. I wallow and swallow the candy of sighs, And live with the sight of you in my eyes. It is my solace my weakness imbue. It is my comfort my shadow my coup. It's my oasis where waits futures goal. It is the abode I meet with your soul. I wait in the shadow of dreamers extreme. I wait in the seem, of the coming redeem. |
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Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
Beautifully done Sy. I wait as well, shall we wait together? |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
This is absolutly beautiful, Sy May I please wait with you two? This may take a long time, you know. Love ya Liz |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Marilyn, Looks like your going to have to get in line. LOL Thanks for the read. Elizabeth, Why not, it looks like you'll have company. Love Sy |
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netswan Senior Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 1369Washington |
Seymour this is well done and very lovely. Thank you for sharing this netswan |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Hey, I've got experience as a waiter! I'll be there!! Where soul is the goal and love is the guide....terrific, Sy |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
sy, this writing just like your others leaves me deep in thought pondering you have a true gift with words and a poetic soul that shines thru with every stanza. take care amy ~Live today as though it were your last but prepare for tomorrow as though it were here~ |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Netswan, Thank you so much, I like the way you write too. Balladeer, You always catch the best line. Aimster, A very sweet comment, thank you so much. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
you wait divinely poet friend ... this is exceptional writing Sy!! so much depth... excellent, truly ~as always, Take Care,JM~ -------------- I know it's been a long road To get these towns behind me and I Will gladly reap what we may sow-- I am there for you ... and you're there for me ... Are you waiting for Heart in hand Woman and man See me where I stand I am Heart Heart in hand ~vertical horizon~ |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Janet, Thank you so much for the excellent. *L* |
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tincan5 Junior Member
since 2000-04-25
Posts 33 |
Really nice job on this poem, it is very well written |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
A wonderful poem, Sy... enjoyed this much. I particularly liked these lines: "It is my solace my weakness imbue. It is my comfort my shadow my coup. It's my oasis where waits futures goal. It is the abode I meet with your soul. I wait in the shadow of dreamers extreme. I wait in the seem, of the coming redeem." The last two closing lines are classic... superb... thanks for the read! |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
"I wallow and swallow the candy of sighs," one hell of a line. Corinne |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Tincan, Thank you for the nice comment. Doreen, You are welcome and thank you. Corinne, Enjoy your poetry and thank you for the nice comment. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Seymour~ I'm reminded of the Danish Bakery ... got your number ? I've got mine ... *giggles* All 'phunny' aside .. remarkable thoughts, my friend. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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ESP Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556Floating gently on a cloud.... |
I wait too my friend! Can I join the group of awaiting souls?! Lovely poem and so wise! Love and hugs, Lizzie "Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight." |
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Cerenity Member Elite
since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637Escondido-California |
Hi Sy, This is awesome, a keeper for sure, enjoyed the read very much. Thank you, Cerenity |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Marge, Punnin aside, take a number. *L* ESP, Sure pull up a chair and we'll wait together. *L* Cerenity, Thanks for the awesome. *L* |
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