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Open Poetry #7

The Last Collapse

jaxjoy
Member

since 1999-12-14

Posts 112
Texas

0 posted 2000-04-26 07:03 PM

The Last Collapse

I'll put myself
to rest tonight.
And with the
closing of my eyes,
so closes a door.
God help whomever
turns the key
and hopes to find
a familiar face.
I'm the stranger
you pass in the street.
I'm the muffled voice
across the crowd.
Not a soul has listened.
My reflection anonymous.
It is said in death
we can peer upon ourselves
in our final moments,
watching, waiting
for the last collapse.
The moment we cease.
Yet here I stand
and I am able
to witness this moment.
All the while,
believing I am alive.
God help whomever
reaches out
expecting my hand.
I need not this pity.
All that strength
has brought me
is weakness.
I falter
even as I lie
in God's arms
and he whispers
how much he needs me.
How he won't let me go.
He is the only reason
my eyes will open
to another day.
My life is not my own.

Go0fYdUcK
Junior Member

since 2000-04-22

Posts 28
CA

1 posted 2000-04-26 08:35 PM

this poem is really well put. it doesnt seem like you're having the best year of your life, eh? well i really liked you poem! it was really touching and sad yet...a typical, predictable day. awesome job!

*KhAnH-eLySe*

Jeffrey Carter

Member Elite

since 2000-04-08

Posts 2367
State of constant confusion!

2 posted 2000-04-26 10:10 PM

This is a really powerful piece. Great job.

All my love,
Jeffrey

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

3 posted 2004-05-13 03:40 AM

I understand this

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