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Silence of the Stars
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Silence of the Stars |
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PoeticKnight Senior Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 1144New Orleans, LA |
You come and go as you traverse the sky Oceans apart still we never shall fall United beyond what passes these eyes For no Earthly sum would we miss it all From beginnings until ending’s sad sound We never asked for anything like this Just to keep heads in air and feet on ground But we betrayed ourselves with a first kiss Someday became one day then just never As the noise grew louder, hands to my ears The pain grew greater as I remembered That the loudest sound was us with you here Your beauty has been compared to the stars, Your absence is the silence that they are |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
very nice poem yuh i likes it good message and keeping form |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
We never asked for anything like this Just to keep heads in air and feet on ground But we betrayed ourselves with a first kiss Someday became one day then just never ----------------- That the loudest sound was us with you here Your beauty has been compared to the stars, Your absence is the silence that they are ------------------------- this is excellent jer, love the metaphors and imagery of the stars and sky... and the emotional imagery is perfect. your muse said all the right things ... keep listening to her/him  very well written very cool poem...Love the title too. your jm Is it too much to find an answer, Is it too much to hold you close. Is it too much to find a reason, Is it too much to free my soul -- From self control ... And I know you're always waiting for me ... You take me far away, And I know you're holding me ... And it's better now ... ~vertical horizon~ |
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jaxjoy Member
since 1999-12-14
Posts 112Texas |
"Someday became one day then just never" Words of pain but yet beauty can still come of it. Beautiful piece. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
JML, Enjoyed the read. |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
"Your beauty has been compared to the stars, Your absence is the silence that they are" Sigh, this is great my friend. . . it would appear that we have both heard the silence of the stars. . . Excellent as always my fellow romantic. . . ------------------------------------------------------ That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
this was so very pretty to read! u had some very lovely imagery in this one jerry! you are quite the hopeless romantic it seems. take care! amy  ~Live today as though it were your last but prepare for tomorrow as though it were here~ |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
beautiful |
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