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The Patchwork Coat
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The Patchwork Coat |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
She wears a coat of many colors a patchwork of her life. Memories of days gone by as daughter, mother and wife. Her mother’s well worn apron here, here daughter’s favorite skirt, a piece of vest her son always wore, and a piece of her husband’s shirt. Her mother died quite suddenly with a painful disease of the heart her daughter ran away that year and her life seemed to fall apart. Her husband worked longer hours so alcohol became her friend. Her son went off to fight a war a foreign bullet was his end. What money she has is used for drink, and she eats only if it’s free. Her hands flutter and touch her coat invoking images of what used to be. Days and nights spent on the street curling up at night on a stair dreaming of a former life filled with tenderness and care. |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
oman sniff very well written yuh! |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
There's a reason you are called deVine.... what an absolutely divine poem. Excellent. |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Sharon~ Too sad and too true for too many. Tender job, hon. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
I can't recall the last time I read a more poignant piece of writing, Ms. Poet...this is absolutely superb. ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Wonderful work deVine. . . You have truly found a small masterpiece here . . . ---------------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Go0fYdUcK Junior Member
since 2000-04-22
Posts 28CA |
oh my gosh..dat is one of the best poems i have ever come across...the image of her love for her coat is really touching...how that is a history photo album of her life...GReeAt job! *KhAnH-eLySe* |
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Alicat Member Elite
since 1999-05-23
Posts 4094Coastal Texas |
PdV...this was so touching, that I was inspired to pen a reply in verse...a response, if you will. Thank you for writing such tremendously impacting poetry..it is an inspiration to the rest of us. In awe, Alicat |
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A Romantic Heart Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-03
Posts 5496Forever In Your Heart |
Miss Devine this was so fine, like sweet red wine, Thank you for your Rhyme!!! twas beautiful!!  PS I THINK WE SHOULD HAVE A HOMELESS POETRY CHALLENGE!!!!???? [This message has been edited by A Romantic Heart (edited 04-26-2000).] |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
PD...this poem is SO well written ... I am very moved by the emotions and images of this piece ... oustanding work here!!! take care, jm Well the sun sets gently on your shoulders And it makes me want to touch you there. And the light in your eyes makes me feel Like there's something much better out there Something kind... And I know someday I might be looking around Trying to find some purpose Well purpose it can't be that hard to find As long as I've got the wind... The wind and your love to carry me. vertical horizon |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
You have a wonderful way of taking an important issue and portraying it perfectly through your poetry, PdV... This work is certainly no exception... Superb..  |
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ESP Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556Floating gently on a cloud.... |
Wow, Ms DeVine!! This is...what can I say...well, the words I would use is "tragically beautiful", if you know what I mean. Another leaf for the famous vine!! Love and hugs, Lizzie  "Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight." |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
PDV This is an amazing piece, I've never seen anything like it you've answered the often unanswered question of one life..."how did you come to be homeless" You have an amazing gift and I thank you so much for sharing it. Hold me for yesterday Kiss me for tomorrow But love me for today. |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Thank you for your kind replies. It seems the issue of homelessness was a 'cause' a few years ago and now has been pushed to the background. There are still a lot of people who, for one reason or another, do not have a stable place to lay their head at night. It's amazingly easy to become homeless, given the right circumstances.... |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Devine you bring tears to my eyes! What you say is true. We're all only a pay check away from being in the same position. Only by the Grace of God am I where I am today! |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Very sad, pain filled poem, Sharon. Excellent writing. Denise |
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LoveBug
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Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
So beautiful, and so sad. It makes me feel so lucky for what I have. Good job. "We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Brilliant! Caring for a cause, holding the verses together, behold my warmest apreciations, may your pen yield many more such words. Thanks for putting down these feelings! Sudhir Iyer. Take each day as it comes, Consider each day as a flight, Try hard to succeed and fly, Surely then you will reach some height. But if by some chance you don’t, Remember that tomorrow will always come. Learn this well and learn this hard That today’s efforts will pay for tomorrow’s fun. A Crazy Monster, a.k.a Ski |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Your humanity and sincerity shines though on this one, Sharon. Beautiful work..... |
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Cerenity Member Elite
since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637Escondido-California |
Hi Poet deVine, This is just wonderful my friend and you are so right this issue has been push to the back burner and these people are now unfortunetly part of every day life all around us so we are so used to seeing them we forget what they are going through, it is a sad thing to happen to a country that prides its self on stability. Thank you for sharing this, Cerenity |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
beautiful |
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