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In reply to "The Patchwork Coat" by PdV
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In reply to "The Patchwork Coat" by PdV |
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Alicat Member Elite
since 1999-05-23
Posts 4094Coastal Texas 
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Seeking around, no job to be found, I happened upon that place No job I found, though I sought around, but met a kindred face Her skin was worn, her clothes were torn, and I caught her eye My jeans were torn, my coat was worn, as I stettled down with a sigh Beneath the stairs, blind to stares, I asked her of her coat And blind to stares, under the stairs, she told me, rote by rote What she had lost was beyond all cost, as we sat beneath the stairs And out slipped a tear, the first in a year, oblivious to the stares I made a vow that I'd help somehow, and left with purpose anew And though I found work, despite back's quirk, she died with the dew At the grave site, the sun shining bright, I was the only bloke Noone was there, none seemed to care of the lady in the patchwork coat Alicat [This message has been edited by Alicat (edited 04-26-2000).] |
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A Romantic Heart Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-03
Posts 5496Forever In Your Heart |
Sad but beautiful story!!!  |
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Nan
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Very nicely done, persnikitty... Each and every homeless person has a unique story to tell... Each and every one of us "more lucky ones" should listen to them... |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Thank you for your wonderful reply poem. I do see that my "patchwork lady" could end up like this....I'm glad the poem inspired you....perhaps we can collaborate again soon!  |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
its alicaterrific yuh twist is always welcome |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Ali you've left me speechless! Sad, sad, sad... |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Excellent poem in reponse, Ali. Very sad. Denise |
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Alicat Member Elite
since 1999-05-23
Posts 4094Coastal Texas |
Everybody, thank you for your kind words. And a special thanks to Poet deVine, who's writings have inspired me on several occasions. And having read the replies to 'The Patchwork Coat', I can extremely relate...as I may be joining those nameless ranks here within the next month if things don't turn around for me...but, if they don't, I know that it will be a wonderous adventure, if nothing else. Alicat And PdV, yeah, I agree...we need to do another collaboration, as we have a good rapport with bouncing ideas off each other. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
A well done and thoughtful poem! |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
...nice |
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