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hsystems Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 319Murray, UT, USA |
Something Something inside of me vanished, today; With sorrow, I watched it depart. My eyes brimmed with teardrops; a lump filled my throat, And darkness crept into my heart. Something I needed has now disappeared; And, with it, my will to go on. It seems to have flown to a far-distant star: The one that I once wished upon. Something that guided my steps now is gone; And, I'm empty, like never before. Despair and dark anguish encompass my soul; For, my power to dream is, no more. -Troy J. Hoecherl- © Troy J Hoecherl All Rights Reserved < !signature--> Beautiful, Thought-Provoking Poetry http://www.h-systems.net/p1.htm [This message has been edited by hsystems (edited 04-25-2000).] |
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netswan Senior Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 1369Washington |
Oh Troy, I hope this is not a new poem. It is so sad -- and well written, of course. Starlight, starbright, give our Troy back his dreams tonight! hugs to you my friend, netswan |
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mariee66 Senior Member
since 2000-01-30
Posts 596Recess, OfYourMind |
This is well written, but so sad, Troy~ Marie~ [This message has been edited by mariee66 (edited 04-25-2000).] |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
.gif) Troy* This is excellent and brings the reader into the darkness with you. You captured the feelings of lost hope acutely. **AW hugs** here's to better days ahead whether this was written for pain today or pain gone by.Hold me for yesterday Kiss me for tomorrow But love me for today. |
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hsystems Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 319Murray, UT, USA |
Teresa - no, this isn't a new poem...but it fits my mood, today. I'm just feeling a little overwhelmed by life at the moment - I'm sure tomorrow will be better. Marie - we all get the blues sometimes, don't we? I'll be all right...just havin' a rough day. Thanks for your kind comments! Troy Beautiful, Thought-Provoking Poetry http://www.h-systems.net/p1.htm |
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hsystems Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 319Murray, UT, USA |
Butterflies - ya snuck in there on me, while I was responding to Teresa and Marie! Thanks for the hug, and I'm sure things will get better. Troy Beautiful, Thought-Provoking Poetry http://www.h-systems.net/p1.htm |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Butterflies often do that  |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
You know, this piece has impeccable meter and conveys the sadness you were feeling beyond any question. Lovely writing, Troy. ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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hsystems Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 319Murray, UT, USA |
Claire - thank you for your kind words, my friend! It's too bad that sometimes our best poems arise out of sorrow...  Troy Beautiful, Thought-Provoking Poetry http://www.h-systems.net/p1.htm |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Troy....... Powerful words, my friend. Hope that you feel better real soon!!!! Great writing!!! Too bad pain inspired it.... Hang in there!!!!!  Lone Wolf Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end. --Michael W. Smith |
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LoveBug
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Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
This poem really touched me. You see, I often dreamed about a man that I loved, and when I finally got tired of living in a dream, I asked him out. He refused, and now I see him for what he really is. I thought I had lost the power to dream and have hope, but I found that it was there the entire time, it was just that I couldn't see it because I was mired in so much sorrow. You still have the power to dream, my friend. You just don't see it right now, but you will again. I promise. "We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
The sorrow and despair are portrayed well, Troy. Excellent writing. Denise |
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hsystems Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 319Murray, UT, USA |
Lone Wolf - thank you, my friend! I'm sure that I will be "on the mend," soon. LoveBug - I'm happy (but also sad) that you can relate. It's always nice to be reassured that others have faced the same trials, but it's also a shame to see others suffering. I'm sure that this state of mind/heart won't last - I just need to "recharge my emotional batteries." Thanks again for all of the kind comments! Troy Beautiful, Thought-Provoking Poetry http://www.h-systems.net/p1.htm |
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hsystems Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 319Murray, UT, USA |
Denise - thank you, my friend! Your comments mean a lot to me! Troy Beautiful, Thought-Provoking Poetry http://www.h-systems.net/p1.htm |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I understand |
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