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The Empress |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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There is a seed, swells within, promise of myself unseen. Everything I've left undone-- restlessness, alive and free. Expectant, in my quickening, yet to bask beneath the sun, to bathe my soul in sweet sea breeze. A crown of stars, awaiting me... I'm done with you, and you--you too... should y'dare stand inbetween, me and my need for the truth, commanding: All guilt be rebuked; for all that I have yet to see. Claiming now, my destiny. Myself, I am embracing me. |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
Bravo!!! That's the way to tell 'em. Strong writing there. Great work btw All my love, Jeffrey |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Great work, serenity, enjoyed that one immensely - sudhir. Take each day as it comes, Consider each day as a flight, Try hard to succeed and fly, Surely then you will reach some height. But if by some chance you don’t, Remember that tomorrow will always come. Learn this well and learn this hard That today’s efforts will pay for tomorrow’s fun. A Crazy Monster, a.k.a Ski |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
HOW did I MISS this one??? I am here now (smile) Everything I've left undone-- restlessness, alive and free. Expectant, in my quickening, yet to bask beneath the sun, to bathe my soul in sweet sea breeze. -------------------- for all that I have yet to see. Claiming now, my destiny. Myself, I am embracing me. ------------ oh my girl...you mirror my heart in this piece to perfection. ( when I stub my toe in the dark..do you feel the pain)  this is so full of your sweet honest emotions...oh how I know... my nickname should be "unrequited"(smile) watch for my next poem by the same name...I'll be holding up that mirror. loves ya-- me twin of emotions, jm Is it too much to find an answer, Is it too much to hold you close. Is it too much to find a reason, Is it too much to free my soul -- From self control ... And I know you're always waiting for me ... You take me far away, And I know you're holding me ... And it's better now ... ~vertical horizon~ |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Can I watch...... seriously this is wonderful self assuring poem, finding and loving oneself.... cheers.... can I still watch...  Parker |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
JC--and a sweet encore to you! You have been so lovely sweet, I thank you. Sudhir---did I miss your debut? Much thanks-- ('n I love your 'Crazy Monster'.... Jm----was away for awhile--am back for just a bit---(all is fab) love t'you, m'twin. Parker--watch all y'want, m'sweet...but don't forget to whisper those sweet lies... love & laughter t'ya. thanx to all--serenity |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
JC--and a sweet encore to you! You have been so lovely sweet, I thank you. Sudhir---did I miss your debut? Much thanks-- ('n I love your 'Crazy Monster'.... Jm----was away for awhile--am back for just a bit---(all is fab) love t'you, m'twin. Parker--watch all y'want, m'sweet...but don't forget to whisper those sweet lies... love & laughter t'ya. thanx to all--serenity |
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hsystems Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 319Murray, UT, USA |
serenity - this is simply gorgeous! Such a beautiful expression of emotion - and I love the form! My rhymes are usually every line or every other line rhyming, and I admire your ability to mingle the rhyming verses. Keep up the good work...and if yer leavin' again, hurry back!  Troy Beautiful, Thought-Provoking Poetry http://www.h-systems.net/p1.htm |
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