Open Poetry #7 |
The Muddy River (a spiritual journey) |
Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
The muddy river Jordan In a land called Jerusalem It seems so long ago and far away But I wish I'd been there standing in the sun When John baptized Jesus on that day That old water might look muddy from the outside But when you're standing in it it's so clear Cause you look back and you realize That our Lord Jesus Christ was baptized here Many times I've read in my bible about that great event Oh, but to see the one who was heaven sent And to those of you who don't believe what happened on that day When I cross the chilly Jordan this is what I'll say That old water might look muddy from the outside But when you're standing in it it's so clear Cause you look back and you realize That our Lord Jesus Christ was baptized here This was written in song format. Tell me what you think. |
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mariee66 Senior Member
since 2000-01-30
Posts 596Recess, OfYourMind |
I like it~ I was singing as I read it~~ Nicely done~ (Glad to see I'm not the only one up ) Marie~ |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
I think it is perfect Jeffery! Your friend, Marina |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
JC--this is a lovely song of salvation... (are you a musician?) If not, you should be. A happy resurrection to you. love serenity |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
I think it sings a beautiful message for us all, Jeffrey. God bless you, my friend and Happy Easter. Michael |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
Thanks guys, I appreciate your comments. anyone have msn messenger? All my love, Jeffrey |
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mariee66 Senior Member
since 2000-01-30
Posts 596Recess, OfYourMind |
How about AOL IM!!??? |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
that will work too what is your s/n? [This message has been edited by Jeffrey Carter (edited 04-22-2000).] |
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erieval Member
since 2000-03-21
Posts 56northeasten pa. |
Dear Jeff, What a wonderful journey you have written about. The message does look muddy also, until we except Jesus as our Lord. THEN EVERTHING GETS CLEAR THAT YOU DIDN'T SEE BEFORE. Things get clear that we didn't understand before, because the mud is washed away. Great poem Jeff. Keep them coming. I could feel the rythem. Love, Erie |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
Thank you all again for those kind words. They do not go unappreciated. All my love, Jeffrey |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
I enjoyed reading this and Jesus did say he is the way, the truth, and the life. James |
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WhiteNite Member
since 2000-04-09
Posts 241Montgomery, AL |
Song format? Yeah, I guess I see it now... I was so captured by the message that I didn't realize how well it flowed! Great work! "Don't let your character get camoflaged with your environment. Find who you are and let it stay in its true colors." --Rachel Joy Scott |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
-Jeff I have been following your work since you started posting at Passions. I must say I am quite impressed! This poem here is one of the perfect reasons why. You write w/ such heart, depth, clarity, and grace. I truly mean that. You have a rare gift. I loved this piece, beautiful song and poem. Take care. AMY P.S. I have AOL instant messenger...sn is amyk331. ~Live today as though it were your last but prepare for tomorrow as though it were here~ |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
Nicely written. I enjoyed your poem. |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
Wonderfully written sir. Lovely message, and I sure would like to hear you sing it ! Er....you can sing, can't you? hehe Fabulous, seriously! |
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