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Misfortune on high seas- inspired by Corinne
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Misfortune on high seas- inspired by Corinne |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium 
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This one I owe to Corinne, and at her behest, I post this.....please read her poem first, that would give you a better insight, I think... Misfortune on high seas ------------------------------ Ship-wrecked sailor, seeing life's deathly trailor, Woes spread, tragedy unfathomed, desolate dread, Lonely, battered, Former fighter, Devoured baiter. Many a ship's battle he fought, Now, its all come to naught, All his glory is now laid waste, Sea-gulls, vultures, suck life post-haste. Busy-bodies from far and yonder, Even sharks stay, await in wonder, The solo musical performance of death, Alaskan melancholy, frost-bites, a sorrowful wreath. My heart is pounding, my stomach's inside out I'm feeling kind-a-shaky, my mind is full of doubt All I ever think about, is fearing fear itself, Wish I could unscrew my head and put it on the shelf Everything is twisted, everything is oh so tight, Don't know what I'm looking at, the lights are all too bright My brain's about to crumble, spill out on the floor Sweep 'em up. Throw 'em away, don't want 'em anymore Clouds race across the sky, day turns into night, Still there are the questions, no answers in sight Everything is twisted, everything is oh so tight, Starin' out the window, everything is just too bright Brain's about to crumble, spill out on the floor, Wish I could unscrew my head, and kick it out the door... You know I'm feeling kind-a....Strange You know I'm feeling kind-a....Strange ~ Strange ~ Joe Satriani (Flying in a Blue Dream) |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Fantastic, Sudhir, I especially like these two lines: "Devoured baiter" and "Sea-gulls, vultures, suck life post-haste." Big smile here! Corinne |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
That Corinne is pretty inspirational, isn't she...this is great, Sudhir! |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Corinne, Flashing big smiles back  Thank you for everything Martie, Corinne is a sheer force full of inspiration. thanks for reading... Regards, sudhir |
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shilpi Member
since 2000-05-24
Posts 73 |
The solo musical performance of death, Alaskan melancholy, frost-bites, a sorrowful wreath. ******** No one could have put in better !! Class of a kind, and an exotic one too !! regards, shilpi |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
She inspired a vivid tale!! Her's amazed me with so few lines capturing so much and yours has done the same....Thank you for sharing this inspired tale! |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Shilpi, butterfly, Thanks a lot for your lavish words... Saluting you both, Sudhir. |
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