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A lover pleading, "Please say Yes" (For Sven's love poem challenge -Attempt #2) |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium 
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I was deciding whether to post this for the Sven's challenge or not. I thought might be unfair if I post 2 for the challenge. So a gentlemanly gesture from this obnoxious, rustic one, I submit this one as a tribute to love... < !signature-->May the romance sparkle tender dazzlers in each heart, kindling in a way that makes loving souls shine ... A lover pleading, "Please say Yes" ----------------------------------------------- Eyes sparkle like stars, I see at night, So sweet are they, I think I might fall in love while, I fight what's true, Night or day all I see, in my eyes, is you. Early dawn or dusky sunsets fine lilting shades of vermilion in the sky, So bright does your face shine, I wish, with coupled wings, we could fly Waiting here to hear a 'yes' from you I ask from you nothing more Than to return the love that I offer you Needing love's reassurance, nothing more ~ Tender skin so smooth like the velvet skies, To touch it before I hear 'yes', I am afraid, Might ruin the texture, bringing tears in my eyes This silken skin, I will caress, if the light moves to green from red Assure you this love shall live Till the sun and moon combine, For my love is much too strong and divine, To you, all I have, my heart, my soul, I will give If you later may betray me, leaving me alone, Be sure that still this love will never be gone, 'Cause I will remain of no one else but you Forever, my heart will always belong to you. ~ From you, all I wish to hear tonight is "I love you" If I don't hear these words, 'tis true, I shall be left in the cold, lonely and blue, To see then the colour in my eyes, you shall have to say, "I love you". The evening breeze blows, fate's whispering your pleasant name, While this heart eagerly anticipates, waits A desperate soul says 'its high time you came'. For that I love you, nature is to blame Not my fault, that you were made this way, Tender at heart, beautiful in soul, a rousing flame Sunrise or sunset, the brilliance in any dazzling ray. ~ Though 'love is blind' I've heard them say, The love that I have for you can be easily seen that it is so eager, so keen. What else to you my dear, can I say, Except that you are the only one for me, And that your eyes sparkle like the stars I see. Pleadingly yours, I remain, Awaiting your 'Yes'! ---------------------------------------- 10/06/2000 - Heeding to my head turning, I decided to announce this for the contest. Sir Sven and other grand knights, On guard... ---------------------------------------- My heart is pounding, my stomach's inside out I'm feeling kind-a-shaky, my mind is full of doubt All I ever think about, is fearing fear itself, Wish I could unscrew my head and put it on the shelf Everything is twisted, everything is oh so tight, Don't know what I'm looking at, the lights are all too bright My brain's about to crumble, spill out on the floor Sweep 'em up. Throw 'em away, don't want 'em anymore Clouds race across the sky, day turns into night, Still there are the questions, no answers in sight Everything is twisted, everything is oh so tight, Starin' out the window, everything is just too bright Brain's about to crumble, spill out on the floor, Wish I could unscrew my head, and kick it out the door... You know I'm feeling kind-a....Strange You know I'm feeling kind-a....Strange ~ Strange ~ Joe Satriani (Flying in a Blue Dream) [This message has been edited by Sudhir Iyer (edited 06-10-2000).] |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
Man, oh, man I'm definitely glad that this is not a competition. No one would stand a chance next to this one. The fair maiden's are sure to be swooning over this.  All my love, Jeffrey I lie awake in a world filled with dreams, but dreams can be so real when you don't know you're asleep |
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amazon_lover Member
since 2000-04-09
Posts 491Dublin,Ireland |
nice poem for a lovely maiden.. a lot of commitment to love....a plea done with dignity and faith.. Sincerely A_L |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Jeffery, You are being too lavish... Thank you... A_L, Thank you for your beautiful words... Regards, sudhir. |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Whilst I see so many great knights posting up their sentiments in pure romantic words, I feel a touch insecure now... lovely ladies here are surrounded by brave knights challenged by sven.... Tentatively pushing this up for all you fair ladies to see and read...please say 'yes' ...Should I or should I not, put this up for the challenge, I still wonder, questions causing many a pang in my muddled head... |
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A Romantic Heart Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-03
Posts 5496Forever In Your Heart |
This one should have been posted for the challenge, so full of romantic words, words women love to hear... |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Oh yes, YES! Sunshine ~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow. Helen Keller ~~~ |
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shilpi Member
since 2000-05-24
Posts 73 |
YES YES YES......!!!!!!! To all thy questions, My lips outline yes, Ohh fear not, all will bend, Unchalleged, thou shall stand, For thee has no equal.... lol !! I'm sure I've confused the thou's and thee's......Sudhir, each time I read your poem, I feel I can never feel the emotions better than this, but I'm wrong all the time !!! Have a wonderful day 'n take care shilpi p.s I'm having a very difficult time selecting the stanza i like the best....every word says soooooo much !! |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Just lovely Sudhir ... big heavy sigh ... wonderful poem! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Romantic heart, I heed to your behest, my mind has been made up, I will announce this one in for the contest...Thanks for your precious words... Karilea, Thank you. Shilpi, the words that your spend as gifts of appreciation are too profound for me... thank you. Kit, Thank you ... thanks a lot to all, My warm regards. My heart is pounding, my stomach's inside out I'm feeling kind-a-shaky, my mind is full of doubt All I ever think about, is fearing fear itself, Wish I could unscrew my head and put it on the shelf Everything is twisted, everything is oh so tight, Don't know what I'm looking at, the lights are all too bright My brain's about to crumble, spill out on the floor Sweep 'em up. Throw 'em away, don't want 'em anymore Clouds race across the sky, day turns into night, Still there are the questions, no answers in sight Everything is twisted, everything is oh so tight, Starin' out the window, everything is just too bright Brain's about to crumble, spill out on the floor, Wish I could unscrew my head, and kick it out the door... You know I'm feeling kind-a....Strange You know I'm feeling kind-a....Strange ~ Strange ~ Joe Satriani (Flying in a Blue Dream) |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Brave Knight Sudhir, thou hast indeed penned a poem of love That sings as to the angels up in heaven above A poem of love's gentle pleading To a heart that is in want of being Please Brave Knight, do not sell thy skills short Thou hast indeed held thine own in this poetic sport! With words like this to hold for all to see Methinks that I should be worried about you, instead of you being worried about me!! ----------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
The evening breeze blows, fate's whispering your pleasant name, While this heart eagerly anticipates, waits A desperate soul says 'its high time you came'. For that I love you, nature is to blame Not my fault, that you were made this way, Tender at heart, beautiful in soul, a rousing flame Sunrise or sunset, the brilliance in any dazzling ray. A wonderful poem, I gladly bow before your poetic might. ------------------------ "I've been too honest with myself I should have lied like everybody else"-Richey Edwards "Take nothing but pictures. Leave nothing but footprints. Kill nothing but time". Baltimore Grotto "Libraries gave us power Then work came and made us free What price now for a shallow piece of dignity" Nicky Wire, A design for Life. manic street preachers "Rock 'n' roll is our epiphany Culture, alienation, boredom and despair" "To be nobody-but-yourself-in a world which is doing its best night and day, to make you everybody else - means to fight the hardest battle which any human being can fight; and never stop fighting." E.E Cummings. |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Well, Sudhir, you've captured what women want to hear, they want those 3 simple words...not to be lies. corinne |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Sven, brian, Corinne, Thanks a lot for your kind words... Thank you. Sudhir |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
"The silken skin I will caress, if the light turns to green from red." I am also awaiting a greenlight with much anticipation. Very soft and warm poem displaying your soft and tender heart. May God bless you with the sweetheart of your desires. James |
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