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Ethan Halo Senior Member
since 2000-04-28
Posts 793on the roof again 
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alive and alone At the end of this tunnel, there could be a light. First, i must want to open my eyes. I see through you know; now I realize there's more to life than choking down your lies. There's a place out there where i can live my life. You won't be there, but that's a good thing, right? You won't control me by causing me strife. I feel better and empty all at the same time. You hate me now, as always. It's plain to see. How'd you ever look me in the eye? Why'd you lie to me? With that perfect smile I'd have never known... Now I see that I must walk alone. I don't turn to anyone. I turn inside myself. I'm my only constant. The most determined man in Hell. Sometimes I don't even feel like trying, but you only get what you give. I've got to stop the feel of dying and teach myself to live. We all got somethin' to atone for. |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
wow! this was very powerful. i felt this when i read it. this is laced with sadness, anger, yet also hope. a hope that there is something better out there. i am glad you are able to write this all out and begin to work through it. the journey of life is long and hard. i hope you find happiness. take care. amy  "Don't be dismayed at goodbyes. A farewell is before you can meet again. And meeting again after a moment or a lifetime is certain for those who are friends." "Fate exists but it can only take you so far, Because once you're there It's up to you to make it happen." |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
At the end of this tunnel, there could be a light. First, i must want to open my eyes. -------------- You won't be there, but that's a good thing, right? ----------- I feel better and empty all at the same time. ------------ I'm my only constant. The most determined man in Hell. Sometimes I don't even feel like trying, but you only get what you give. I've got to stop the feel of dying and teach myself to live. ---------- man, you are just so good at this  you write like I feel. this is perfect, there are so many great lines in this... when we get hurt like this, it does feel like hate... and it does feel like were gonna get lost in it. and you last lines say it all only we can let go of it. wisdom from getting burned, (i know) another excellent poem Ethan thanks for "stalker" exchange today later-poet-gator jm I think I could need - this in my life I think I'm just scared - that I know too much I can't relate and that's a problem I'm feeling ... If you're gone - maybe it's time to go home There's an awful lot of breathing room But I can hardly move If you're gone - baby you need to come home cuz there's a little bit of something me... In everything in you. ~MB20~ "What the caterpillar calls the end ... The world calls a butterfly" ~Lao Tze Tao~ ~Butterflies are meant to be free~ |
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Rosebud1229 Senior Member
since 2000-04-05
Posts 1813North Carolina |
Ethan, very sad , one thing I do know with poetry you are never alone let the words comfort your heart soul and mind. As days go by so will the pain that seems to caress you so. The one thing I love about poetry is that it always opens one heart.Have you felt the door of your heart easing back open it's a glorious feeling. Nice writing keep it up Rosebud |
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Ethan Halo Senior Member
since 2000-04-28
Posts 793on the roof again |
Thank you all for all your kindly criticism!! JM- a good stalker is always appreciated. i'll return the favor. Aimster- thanks for reading my stuff. your patience and kindness are always appreciated as well! Rosebud-truer words were never spoken. i don't know how it works, but i'm glad it always does. We all got somethin' to atone for. |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
At the end of this tunnel, there could be a light. First, i must want to open my eyes. I see through you know; now I realize there's more to life than choking down your lies. ..... Sometimes I don't even feel like trying, but you only get what you give. I've got to stop the feel of dying and teach myself to live. ......... Ethan, this one is sheer POWER....the strife is so visible, transparent as clearest crystal... Here, take some hope that I give, with all best wishes for you... Yeah, continue the poetry, there is lots of solace in this... Regards and take care, Sudhir Hey you, out there in the cold, Getting lonely, getting old, can you feel me? Hey you, standing in the aisle, With itchy feet and fading smile, can you feel me? Hey you, don't help them to bury the light. Don't give in without a fight. Hey you, out there on your own, Sitting naked by the phone, would you touch me? Hey you, with your ear against the wall, Waiting for someone to call out, would you touch me? Hey you, would you help me to carry the stone? Open your heart, I'm coming home.... by Roger Waters (Pink Floyd) - The Wall |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Ethan~ Some powerful feelings here .... 'you only get what you give. I've got to stop the feel of dying and teach myself to live.' and some gems of wisdom. Well done, sir. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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netswan Senior Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 1369Washington |
Ethan this is a strong piece of writing. It is very good. ---) ~netswan |
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