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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855
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it resonates with flight, eyes dark jewels, the bird into the air, fast beats moving small paper wrappers. it resonates with the ache of wanting to be part of the sky. it resonates with the simple pleasure of the air. currently, this bird flies. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
very cool imagery, I cant wait to hear what inspired this...its never what I guess...trying to figure out the small paper wrappers  later cool metaphor gator jm/bs I think I could need - this in my life I think I'm just scared - that I know too much I can't relate and that's a problem I'm feeling ... If you're gone - maybe it's time to go home There's an awful lot of breathing room But I can hardly move If you're gone - baby you need to come home cuz there's a little bit of something me... In everything in you. ~MB20~ "What the caterpillar calls the end ... The world calls a butterfly" ~Lao Tze Tao~ ~Butterflies are meant to be free~ |
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X Angel Senior Member
since 1999-11-07
Posts 1521Oregon |
Great idea....I think IMHO that you should embellish this and post it in Prose. It's a slower forum, but has some awesome writers! Good job! ~Heather |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
YEA---what she said... I wish for some BSQ prose too... then i can get my fixx in two forums please please pretty please ... with butterfly slippers on top *smile* (can you tell i've had too much rasberry iced tea tonite)   see I even gave you some candy buttons too  later cool-mike-gator  jm/bs |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
you said it, sweet, "it resonates..." Smiles. Me much better, now. How 'bout you? |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Thanks all for reading. My one question: why embellish -- add filler -- to something that can be said in so few words? This has a long way to travel before it's prose, and that's not its point. And to serenity, Doing fine. A little p'ssed about what happened at work today -- I got reprimanded for writing poetry on the clock, but it goes deeper than that. Let's not even get into it. Mike |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Mike--"poetry on the clock" is ONE great theme/title/line....if ya haven't done so already, take that ball and run with it.... Luv, S'en |
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