Open Poetry #7 |
I just want anyones take on it |
Samha New Member
since 2000-06-06
Posts 1 |
(read please) read please written really really late...... Seeing you like this is truly something to behold you have no idea what is going on right now you are just moving perfectly just existing, beautifully moving, each step is bold Tracked deep behind I hope to catch a glimpse hopping you will see me praying you will notice realizing that you , only you move like that Simply I follow, follow your face, your eyes, the flow of your hair you follow the noise, you follow the sound and the party you don’t care, because you don't know I follow the noise, I follow your heartbeat, your breath in the cold air The deepness of the woods here, the silent pillars of the tree line they remain silent but profound , not unlike me they, however have tact, they are proud in their silence I am scared in my silence, I fear you see the trees Face to face now, and I am still quiet, still breathing quick you are perfect, now you know someone thinks so Now you know someone will do more than simply follow I followed you into the blackness of the woods now we move into the thick Traceing the features on your face, watching your eyes following your eyes seeing myself in your eyes My mind is raceing over wether you like what you see in your eyes The rain began to fall, poinient for us both the air was sweet now, no longer dead the stagnant air is alive and damn sexy sweet air is soothing, I calm down, you open up I shook when you first put your hand on me, put your perfect hand on me me, not anyone else, I am the one here I am what is going on here we are what is going on at this point , you are all that I can see the sceneries are growing in thier beauty the world has slown down for us the minuets hours, the days months, and this moment as long as we say the center of the universe has decided to dress up an make itself known the rain falls , we fall, on my coat, drenched and soaked we play, in the rain, becuase we known something we are the center of the universe but more importantly each others hopes smiling, beautifully, your beautifull when your still but when you smile when you smile we both now and we kiss again and again rolling about we stay warm the trees know no harm we feel love like no other mkeing love to one another in the rain, the thick of the woods I did what I never could [This message has been edited by Samha (edited 06-09-2000).] |
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netswan Senior Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 1369Washington |
Welcome to Passions, Samha! What a lovely love poem --- ~netswan |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
Samha~ wow! let me take a moment to catch my breath! this was simply wonderful! you write with wild vivid imagery and at an amazing emotional depth. welcome to passions...i look foward to reading more of your work. take care. amy "Don't be dismayed at goodbyes. A farewell is before you can meet again. And meeting again after a moment or a lifetime is certain for those who are friends." "Fate exists but it can only take you so far, Because once you're there It's up to you to make it happen." |
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Breathe~ Member
since 2000-02-05
Posts 315Washington... |
Wow! That seems to be all I can manage at this moment...This is just Wonderful! ) I love the time and in between the calm inside me in the space where I can breathe... Sarah McLachlan |
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sarahC Member
since 2000-06-07
Posts 84Michigan |
very good....it really brought me into it...I felt like I was there with you!!! good poetry...keep it up! |
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Ethan Halo Senior Member
since 2000-04-28
Posts 793on the roof again |
Samha- great way to make an entrance. welcome. this was so descriptive and...real. the line that stuck with me afterwards: "the stagnant air is alive and damn sexy " i dig it. keep up the awesome work. i look forward to hearing more from ya. < !signature--> We all got somethin' we need to atone for. [This message has been edited by Ethan_Halo (edited 06-08-2000).] |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Samha, WELCOME TO PASSIONS and have a nice time in this family... You have started your foray into this world of poetry with a nice lilting poem...glad to have read it... Regards, sudhir P.S. a few spelling errors, mere typos could be corrected... meanwhile enjoy this pink floyd song... Hey you, out there in the cold, Getting lonely, getting old, can you feel me? Hey you, standing in the aisle, With itchy feet and fading smile, can you feel me? Hey you, don't help them to bury the light. Don't give in without a fight. Hey you, out there on your own, Sitting naked by the phone, would you touch me? Hey you, with your ear against the wall, Waiting for someone to call out, would you touch me? Hey you, would you help me to carry the stone? Open your heart, I'm coming home.... by Roger Waters (Pink Floyd) - The Wall |
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Saintly15 New Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 1 |
Wow babe, that was super great, i hope to read more of your stuff sometime! |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Welcome to Passions, Samha! Some beautiful words here, just needs a bit of cleaning up, spell check-wise. Corinne |
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