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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396
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Too Long angular positions falsely rest lids burn with every wink aches in cranium pounding mind unable to think draft enters brushing skin bumps of discomfort in view expressionless first face not knowing what to do clawlike nails picking fanglike teeth grinding hair hanging down it continues she is finding too long to count the days to remember exactly how it felt to rest her weary body before she slowly began to melt. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Sounds like someone's getting a  burnGreat job! Sunshine ~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow. Helen Keller ~~~ |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~Wow,...now that I reread it ...that theory so sounds like it applies. It's actually about continuous sleepless nights,..but it's so neat to see how something you write will be interpreted by readers. I find it interesting and fun too, to see what your writing does to others...and see what they can take from it. Thank you Sunshine for reading....it means a lot.  . Take care. *Peace. |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
hey, there, ya lil Spitfire (I always wanted to say that to a young lady), I thought the poem was about sleeplessness over a lost love. I wasn't too far off, was I. Incidently, it made me feel real weary - so I guess you nailed it. Great job! |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
I'm with Lngjhn... first thought was sleeplessness... 'course it's a curse I'm forced to bear, so since I relate...  |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Sleepnesses into a nightmare, yes? Funny, we seem to have this in common, Spitfire! Corinne |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
I too find it interesting to see how others interprete my work, it's all a perspective thing! Great work SpitFire! God grant me the serenity to accept the people I cannot change, the courage to change the one I can, and the wisdom to know it's me. ~Unknown |
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amazon_lover Member
since 2000-04-09
Posts 491Dublin,Ireland |
Hi Spitfire Hope you're not straining yourself very much. Take good care of health and mind. Sincerely A_L |
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Nate Dogg Senior Member
since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658Georgia, Fulton |
Great peace Spitfire, and I hope you get a great suntan! Nathan |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~LngJhn,...thanks for reading. Lots of people have been calling me 'Lil SpitFire....it's cool...I like. hehe. Glad you picked up on the sleeplessness part...but sorry to make you weary.~Christopher,...thank you for taking the time to read. I remember you once saying how you had this very same problem...yuck huh? ~Corinne,...I know. Right after I posted this I read and replied to yours and was just shaking my head...too wierd. Hope you find some rest soon. Take care. ~Eagle One,...thanks for reading. Yeah it is interesting to see other's perspectives. Thanks for the Great Work. ~Amazon_Lover,...thank you for the concern and the kind, kind words. Take care. ~Nate Dogg,...It seems you and Sunshine think alike....pretty cool. Thank you for reading. Happy to see your interpretation. Take care. Thanks again. *Peace. |
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Irie Senior Member
since 1999-12-01
Posts 1493Washington State |
I've had a few of those nights myself. In fact, just had one last night, or was it the night before? LOL, anyway, great poem and I can relate with this one well. ~Sheri |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Spit Fire, I have had some of those nights myself. I hope you do get some rest my friend. Can't keep going on and on without any sleep. Good writing!! LW Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end. --Michael W. Smith |
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