Open Poetry #7 |
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It Takes the Dawn |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion ![]() |
It Takes Dawn Sleep comes readily, Body falling to fatigue, Folding into velvet night. Dreams play easily, ‘Til the clock strikes four, Rounding a downtown corner, The sky lightens visibly, Birds signaling predawn, Streets awash in dream rain. Three balls juggling, Before the eyes, dazzling, Perilous their display, Triple faces of fear: Failure, dismay, isolation Circling, a hostile dance, Sapping restoration, All muscles tightening, Echoing life like a knife. ‘Tis the darkest then, Awake and trembling, When we are most lost. It takes the dawn To bring deep sleep, Safe keeping in morn. © 2000 Corinne Bailey |
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Effigy Member
since 2000-04-11
Posts 486disbelief |
Nice I like. Very pretty poem. |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Triple faces of fear: Failure, dismay, isolation Circling, a hostile dance, Sapping restoration, All muscles tightening, Echoing life like a knife. I know what these restless nights are like, morning can be a mixture of a blessing and a curse. a great poem, dark yet dreamy. ------------------------ "I've been too honest with myself I should have lied like everybody else"-Richey Edwards "Take nothing but pictures. Leave nothing but footprints. Kill nothing but time". Baltimore Grotto "Libraries gave us power Then work came and made us free What price now for a shallow piece of dignity" Nicky Wire, A design for Life. manic street preachers "Rock 'n' roll is our epiphany Culture, alienation, boredom and despair" "To be nobody-but-yourself-in a world which is doing its best night and day, to make you everybody else - means to fight the hardest battle which any human being can fight; and never stop fighting." E.E Cummings. |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Triple faces of fear: Failure, dismay, isolation Circling, a hostile dance, Sapping restoration, All muscles tightening, Echoing life like a knife. ‘Tis the darkest then, Awake and trembling, When we are most lost. It takes the dawn To bring deep sleep, Safe keeping in morn. --------- This is flowing surreal poetry from you Corinne, amazing talent you have got. Thanks for posting this one... Regards, sudhir. Hey you, out there in the cold, Getting lonely, getting old, can you feel me? Hey you, standing in the aisle, With itchy feet and fading smile, can you feel me? Hey you, don't help them to bury the light. Don't give in without a fight. Hey you, out there on your own, Sitting naked by the phone, would you touch me? Hey you, with your ear against the wall, Waiting for someone to call out, would you touch me? Hey you, would you help me to carry the stone? Open your heart, I'm coming home.... by Roger Waters (Pink Floyd) - The Wall |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~Corinne,...you hit this right on. I echo Brian's thoughts about the mornings...so true. Thanks for such a great read. Take care. *Peace. |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Corinne - are you and that lil Spifire keeping each other up at night??? lol - Now I'm really yawning - this is a great depiction of restlessness. |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Thanks,Effigy! Thank you, Brian, I feel you understand. Thank you kindly, Sudhir, Long John and Spitfire. Corinne |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Corinne, this style seemed a little different for you, but as always done very well. Sometimes we have to wait out the night, the warmth of the rising sun, is an ancient comfort. The darkness always passes... I hope you had a wonderful morning. Park |
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Marge Tindal![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Corinne~ Been there .... many times the comfort of the dawn brings the deepest slumber. Kind of like that time between the first alarm and the second one ! Sweet slumber. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Danny Holloway Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034Tulsa, OK |
~~very nice writing~~ dh A life isn't significant except for its impact on other lives. |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Thank you for your kind words, Parker. It will pass, I get insomnia every so often, it usually lasts several weeks then leaves. Thank you, too Marge and Danny. Yes, Marge, it feels safer to sleep at dawn, when I imagine most serial killers are just going to bed! What an imagination, eh? Corinne |
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