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My favorite poem (JMs challenge)
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My favorite poem (JMs challenge) |
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sea_of_okc Senior Member
since 1999-06-15
Posts 568Oklahoma City, OK, USA 
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Earthbound this husk that I call me Container for what once flew free Not bound by laws of gravity Nor with these eyes of mine did see Once did I see through eyes of grace Standing in His holy place Beheld with awe His perfect face Before the dawn of human race Sometimes I think I see Him still His voice my heart and mind does fill Instructs me as I do His will Provides me with unearthly skill He guards me with celestial might Reveals to me the paths of right Gives me strength and will to fight Pervasive evil, mankind's blight My goal His kingdom to restore For eighty years or so before I knock again upon His door To be transformed and fly once more Steven Seaman To thine own self be true... |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Fantastic journey - thank you for sharing with us! Corinne |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
wow this is a very cool poem... great and ambitious rhyme scheme excellent imagery well written thank you for posting it up for the challenge later-sea-gator  jm I think I could need - this in my life I think I'm just scared - that I know too much I can't relate and that's a problem I'm feeling ... If you're gone - maybe it's time to go home There's an awful lot of breathing room But I can hardly move If you're gone - baby you need to come home cuz there's a little bit of something me... In everything in you. ~MB20~ "What the caterpillar calls the end ... The world calls a butterfly" ~Lao Tze Tao~ ~Butterflies are meant to be free~ |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
Wow, I love the first two lines of this...You used some completely unique terms...(husk, container) which really set the mood for the rest of the poem. Kind of gives the reader that "emptiness" in the beginning, of what the speaker is feeling. This is superb, I can definately see why it's your favorite. Bravo sir on looking inside the soul. Have I told you lately that I'm glad you're back? ROFLMAO |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Nice work, Sea....and it IS good to see you back! Stick around for a while You're bound to get a good comment from Poet Femme by writing about anything "husky"!  |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
*applauds* Very nicely done Sea! Elizabeth I'm grabbing my hat and coat I'm leaving the cat a note Quick call me a ferry boat-getting out of town! |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Nicely done! Great theme! |
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