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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855
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My words become unclipped from my tongue Like the dying words of an unknown sonnet, Spoke in the voice of a man who's seen too much, Too much to understand. The brown bottle sweats in my hand. Inside lies my best kept secret: A paradise in a bottle to fog out the pictures I never took the time to learn. The liquid is warm. Blood warm. Salty and hot in my mouth. burning the insides of my unclipped, drenched, Unsober, wavering, lie-soaked tongue. I can imagine a cool palm breeze Under cool palm shadows on the hot sand of a beach. Already, that dream and others like it Are so far out of reach. Little paradise in a little bottle. Take me home to sleep. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
My words become unclipped from my tongue Like the dying words of an unknown sonnet, Spoke in the voice of a man who's seen too much, Too much to understand. The brown bottle sweats in my hand. Inside lies my best kept secret: A paradise in a bottle to fog out the pictures I never took the time to learn. ------------- Already, that dream and others like it Are so far out of reach. Little paradise in a little bottle. Take me home to sleep. ------------ Mike, it is for this reason-- the warm tingle in my spine, the lump in my throat, the feeling deep in my stomach, and heart, that I read poetry... that I breathe poetry... it is poems like this that are my oxygen I thank you for this breath of poetry. butterfly slippers |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
 Thanks for reading. I wrote this today at work after someone gave me a little plastic bottle with a fake palm tree, some sand and mini-shells in it. It's so cool, I was instantly inspired. Of course, the poem has nothing to do with that as much as just drinking, but the title and the "palm shadows on hot sand of a beach" or whatever, came from that.I went to bed at 1 a.m. last night (this morning). I'm not going to repeat THAT mistake. Goodnight, B.S. And god bless (even if you didn't sneeze). Mike |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
well, sigh...this one DOES NOT go on the refrigerator...(full of frosty brown bottles...)but I like, Mike, very much...the voice you use is perfect, without moralizing...awesome, agin, m'friend.... |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
See, I was about to go to sleep, but a friend called. No, really. Anyway, I could go for a cold one right now. I have nothing wrong with beer every once in a while. Yum!'night, S'en. Mike |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Geez, I can relate to this one Mike ... seems everyone takes vacations in our office except me (the woes of a business owner I guess). I even had my nephews bring me back a little bottle of sand from Florida, it sits on my desk at work. If it weren't 6:30 am here ... I'd join you in a cold one! Best wishes, /Kit |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Kit, I'd love to. Here's to you. Man, work is tiring.Mike |
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MagnoliaBlue Member
since 2000-05-12
Posts 367 |
Hey bsq... Loved reading your poem, while I was having a cold one.  Thanks! MagnoliaBlue Pay a visit to: http://cyberageadventures.com You will love it! "A poem is just an expression of my life and heart."*CJB* ~*My Skipper Jim, I love you! Your Lady June*~ |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Jeez, everyone's able to afford cold ones but me! Oh well. Glad you enjoyed.Mike |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Good, realistic, unsweetened poetry....gotta love it. This Bud's for you, sir...... |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Bal, I will gladly drink to that. Mike |
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