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Scarlet Scars |
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David2 Member
since 2000-03-22
Posts 407 |
Scarlet Scars She suffers for the sin of loving well, And bears the scarlet scars of stolen shame. Engaged against the hoary hordes of hell, She struggles to survive the wilting flames. Entrenched in war to save her sanity, She perseveres through bleak and tiresome times, To triumph over vacant vanity, And take to task this coward’s craven crimes. Serenity so soothing seems at hand, And so the race must end in victory, For peace and calm are hers upon demand, So too the end to wicked history. Though buffeted by trials tempestuous, She holds alone her key to happiness. |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
Yep... you are definately good. Well written. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Excellent! |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
oooh you give me such poet envy (smile) I just gotta try one of these little beauties got any tips for a sonnet wanna-be-poet  this was perfect as usual, great job D2 jm Well the sun sets gently on your shoulders And it makes me want to touch you there. And the light in your eyes makes me feel Like there's something much better out there Something kind... And I know someday I might be looking around Trying to find some purpose Well purpose it can't be that hard to find As long as I've got the wind... The wind and your love to carry me. vertical horizon |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
WOW ! |
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Denise
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since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This is wonderful, David! Very smooth, with a great message too! Denise |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
My, what a lovely piece of writing...what I find most attractive here is your subtle use of alliterative language, not intrusive or "fixed," but soft and nearly vocal. Superb. ~ Claire |
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hsystems Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 319Murray, UT, USA |
"To triumph over vacant vanity, And take to task this coward’s craven crimes." There is certainly nothing craven about this piece - bold and melodic. You have a wonderful mastery of the English language, and a true gift for painting pictures with your words. Thanks for another fantastic poem!  Troy Beautiful, Thought-Provoking Poetry http://www.h-systems.net/p1.htm |
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