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7
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since 2000-04-26
Posts 113
Amherst, MA, USA

0 posted 2000-06-05 01:47 PM


a true story... do you think you are happier longing for something than you are when it's over?

***************

before:

(April 8)

one kiss
no more
i adore
you, your
self
not your lips
face
hands
eyes
your disguise
that hides
your heart
from eyes
that are only eyes
hearts
that cannot part
love and sex
that force
meaning only
lonely
bodies

why do i
need a kiss
the bliss
of body and heart?
perhaps because
you will never be
mine
love only me
if our bodies
disagree

after:

(April 20)

one kiss
no more
illusion breaks
you're out the door
i didn't see
it was made by me
the disguise
in your eyes
that hides
no heart
but only lies
that "self" i saw was
mine
only me

why did i
need that kiss
the birth
of truth and pain?
perhaps to bring the illusion
back to earth
to show me the light
and start again


[This message has been edited by 7 (edited 06-05-2000).]

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amazon_lover
Member
since 2000-04-09
Posts 491
Dublin,Ireland
1 posted 2000-06-05 01:54 PM


Hi 7
That was nice satire of kiss. Stranger is now you see in a person who cheated on you and thats right too.

Sincerely
A_L

SpitFire
Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396

2 posted 2000-06-05 11:20 PM


~   Very interesting piece here.  First off,...I love your style of writing in these two...really...umm,. a lot. hehe.

why did i
need that kiss
the birth
of truth and pain?
perhaps to bring the illusion
back to earth
to show me the light
and start again

*This kiss, the birth of truth and pain...wow 7 this is intense.  Well written emotion. Take care. *Peace.

Aimster
Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297
Charlotte, NC
3 posted 2000-06-05 11:24 PM


i really liked your style and
view point here. this was very
interesting to read! great poem.
amy  

 "Don't be dismayed at goodbyes. A farewell is before you can meet again. And meeting again after a moment or a lifetime is certain for those who are friends."

"Fate exists but it can only take you so far,
Because once you're there
It's up to you to make it happen."




tulip
Member
since 1999-07-04
Posts 320
unknown
4 posted 2000-06-06 12:10 PM


Wow,
I loved how this was written 7!  And oh, how true!!!

Irish Rose
Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263

5 posted 2000-06-06 07:19 PM


I liked the way you wrote this one!

 Kathleen

"How do I love thee? Let
me count the ways.
I love thee to the depth and breadth and height
My soul can reach, when feeling out of sight
For the ends of Being and ideal Grace." Elizabeth Barrett Browning


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