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The One Not Written (for JM's challenge)
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The One Not Written (for JM's challenge) |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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This is my heart, incomplete-- and every meet of soul so sweet... This one, all would understand. With these words would I feel the hand of ying coupled within the yang. All the words of heart, unspoken, promise of my birth unbroken--- for every word I've left unsaid I've left my soul twice as dead... Favorite? I've penned none yet. 'Til pray me, I, my soul to rest... If any words be pondered, deep-- I pray the Lord my soul to keep.. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
 I think its poetic and perfect you would be the first to post to this... I LOVE this poem, every word is kissed with your grace... with that gentle vunerability that I so adore about your poetry. *blowing kisses to the south* me loves ya, jm I think I could need - this in my life I think I'm just scared - that I know too much I can't relate and that's a problem I'm feeling ... If you're gone - maybe it's time to go home There's an awful lot of breathing room But I can hardly move If you're gone - baby you need to come home cuz there's a little bit of something me... In everything in you. ~MB20~ "What the caterpillar calls the end ... The world calls a butterfly" ~Lao Tze Tao~ ~Butterflies are meant to be free~ |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
"If any words be pondered, deep-- I pray the Lord my soul to keep.." This was wonderful Serenity ... I really enjoyed this! Best wishes, /Kit |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Loved this serenity, All the words of heart, unspoken, promise of my birth unbroken--- for every word I've left unsaid I've left my soul twice as dead... and even when we write poetry we discard words and images that are poems in their own right. a wonderful response to the challenge. ------------------------ "I've been too honest with myself I should have lied like everybody else"-Richey Edwards "Take nothing but pictures. Leave nothing but footprints. Kill nothing but time". Baltimore Grotto "Libraries gave us power Then work came and made us free What price now for a shallow piece of dignity" Nicky Wire, A design for Life. manic street preachers "Rock 'n' roll is our epiphany Culture, alienation, boredom and despair" |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Serenity~ Very nicely done ... I liked - 'for every word I've left unsaid I've left my soul twice as dead' Love ya' ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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netswan Senior Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 1369Washington |
Sweet as Pie, Serenity - lovely ~netswan |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Thanks again to all. Having much fun just keeping up with challenges...Hugs to my friends, Janet Marie, Marge...aw, what the hell---GROUP HUG!!! |
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spiked Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 873Hammond, La USA |
Very nicely done Serenity You have much life in you, Let it breathe Rich |
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sea_of_okc Senior Member
since 1999-06-15
Posts 568Oklahoma City, OK, USA |
U tryin to make me cry or what? A very moving piece, I can relate well to it at this juncture of my life. Thanks for sharing... HUGS Steve |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
serenity, loved it, very much..... but I must ask what does this mean.... would I feel the hand of ying coupled within the yang. Well whatever it really means, my brain interpreted another way...  |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Rich---I AM breathing dammit! It just keeps coming out like panting...(I'm not bad I'm just written that way...)((Rich)) Steve--no tears, t'nite...hugs to you (Steve) Parker-Helluva a visual, eh? (can't slip ANYTHING by you...) without yer permission, anyway...hee hee |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Serenity I missed this, as I've missed much around here lately. Sorry! I like this and the words just hit home. To pick a favorite line, would be to choose them all, they all spoke to me  |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Thank you White Dove---I have noticed that you have not been hopping about as much lately---have missed your cheerful song....thank you again... |
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