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~Two Sunflower Haikus~
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~Two Sunflower Haikus~ |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA 
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As you can probably tell, I absolutely love sunflowers, they are my all-time favourite flower and are just beautiful and unique. Please tell me which one you prefer, or if they are both okay. 1) ~SEPTEMBER SUNFLOWER HAIKU~ 5-7-5 Golden sunflower glorious September bloom standing tall with pride 2) ~SUNFLOWER DELIGHT HAIKU~ 5-7-5 Golden in unique bloom oh glorious sunflower! for my eyes delight *By Melissa Honeybee [This message has been edited by Melissa Honeybee (edited 06-03-2000).] |
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Cerenity Member Elite
since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637Escondido-California |
Hi Melissa, Well they are both wonderful and I am with you about loving sunflowers, I just planted seven different kinds in seeds I hope they grow. I am loving Sunflower Delight for I can sit and stare at them for hours with total enjoyment, thank you so much for sharing these little jems. Love, Cerenity |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Melissa~ You know I like Haiku ... now you know I like sunflowers. You've given me a double-treat of both. Thank you for sharing. I like them both. Love ya' ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
Hmmm this was a hard choice. I admire people who can write haikus because i can't. i also like sunflowers. i think though that i like your first one better. something about the standing tall with pride really struck a chord with me. but both pieces are lovely! amy  "Don't be dismayed at goodbyes. A farewell is before you can meet again. And meeting again after a moment or a lifetime is certain for those who are friends." "Fate exists but it can only take you so far, Because once you're there It's up to you to make it happen." |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Melissa~ You've done well with both, they are both very beautiful in my eyes. I love Haikus (can't do them myself) and sunflowers so this is a treat Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Marge kindly pointed out to me that the first line of the second haiku is 6 syllables long instead of 5, so the new change is: golden unique bloom oh glorious sunflower! for my eyes delight *Thanks again Marge! |
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Dennis L. White Senior Member
since 2000-02-17
Posts 1463Michigan, U.S.A. |
Melissa, I don't know how I missed these GEMS, WOW! I like them both but if I had to choose one it would be the first one. Golden sunflower glorious September bloom standing tall with pride You've captured color,shape, time and attributed a proud emotion to your subject. WRITE ON! Dennis :^) Moonbeams radiate When the veiling cloud has past Playful shadows dance Dennis L. White :^) |
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