Open Poetry #7 |
A Father's Love (my first poem) |
Denise
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since 1999-08-22
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No earthly bond was stronger No earthly love as true No, nothing in this world compares To the love we received from you. The days drag on much longer Than they ever used to do No, nothing in this world we want We want only to be with you. 'Though some care only for what they can gain In this life that is fading, it’s true We know that you knew in your heart, dear Dad All we ever wanted was you. And the world can take nothing from us That really matters at all, oh, how true For no one could ever take the best The love we received from you. One fine day we will shed this pain When we leave this world so blue There’ll be no more grief and no more tears For we’ll be home with you. Until that day shines bright upon us There’s really nothing else we can do But to share with those around us The love we received from you. Sleep in peace ‘till we’re together again …Us and Mom and You. In Memory of Dad, Francis B. Corbley, 1/23/25 - 1/13/98 6/98 Denise [This message has been edited by dsnyder (edited 06-02-2000).] |
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Elizabeth
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since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
Glad to see this here, Denise. God bless you! Elizabeth And this I say to you: why? Why? Just tell me why, so I can understand. Why? |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
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beautiful Denise and so very touching... and how wonderful the gift of poetry was discovered in you through your need to express your love for your father... very special gift indeed take care, jm There are places inside our souls ... that have never been touched. There are places inside our hearts ... that need to be loved this much. ~Janet Marie~ "What the caterpillar calls the end ... The world calls a butterfly" ~Lao Tze Tao~ ~Butterflies are meant to be free~ |
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MagnoliaBlue Member
since 2000-05-12
Posts 367 |
Such sweet memories, Denise.Well done! Very touching and beautiful. A nice tribute to your dad! MBlue |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Wonderful, loving tribute, Denise. |
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Danny Holloway Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034Tulsa, OK |
Beautifully written and with an earthly wisdom so often ignored. Wonderful tribute to your father. May I speak you words to my father in a prayer? Mine was a loving father as well and sorely missed each day. |
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SEA
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since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Denise~ this is so touching. Beautiful. Thank you for sharing it.-SEA |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
dsnyder, a wonderful first poem and a beautiful ode to your parents. thanks for sharing such a touching tribute. ------------------------ "I've been too honest with myself I should have lied like everybody else"-Richey Edwards "Take nothing but pictures. Leave nothing but footprints. Kill nothing but time". Baltimore Grotto "Libraries gave us power Then work came and made us free What price now for a shallow piece of dignity" Nicky Wire, A design for Life. manic street preachers "Rock 'n' roll is our epiphany Culture, alienation, boredom and despair" |
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Denise
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Thank you, Elizabeth (nice to see you around here again!), Janet Marie, MagnoliaBlue, Martie, Danny, SEA and Brian for reading and for your lovely replies. This was my first poem and one of the few that I had never shared here before.I'm glad it touched you. Yes, Danny, please do. Great Dads like them will always be sorely missed. Denise |
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Poet deVine
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since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Your first and one of your best! I love this Denise. |
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Balladeer
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Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
I see that, right from the start, you wrote by inserting a great deal of feeling in your poetry......and you continue to do so. Very, very nice, Denise. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Denise~ This piece of your heart is very tender and touching. Sorry you had to write it ... but glad you wrote it and opened yourself to the beautiful poetry you pen so well. Love ya' ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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RSEvans Senior Member
since 1999-10-23
Posts 1147Tulsa, OK, USA |
Bless you dear friend. A beautiful first poem and a loving tribute to your father. You shall see him someday again. Rob |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
Denise, this truly wonderful. You made me think back to when my Dad passed in 97. It is beautiful! What an excellent first poem. Marina |
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Denise
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Thank you, Sharon, Balladeer, Marge, Rob and Marina for reading and for your sweet comments. Denise |
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Eloise Senior Member
since 1999-11-27
Posts 1096Wyoming |
This is a beautiful tribute for your dad Denise. Written straight from the heart. |
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Alle'cram Senior Member
since 2000-02-28
Posts 1816Texas |
Denise, Excellent and loving tribute to your dad. Your heart reflects the one for whom you spoke. Beautiful. marcy |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Talent sparkled from the very beginning This is very beautiful and a precious keepsake for future generations Liz |
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Denise
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Thank you, Eloise, Marcy and Elizabeth for reading and for your lovely replies. He was certainly someone very special. Denise |
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