Open Poetry #7 |
~A Piece of You~ |
SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~A Piece of You~ once I found the courage, once I found the strength, I took myself back, I returned to where everything changed... for you,...for me,...for us all. It took some time, it took rivers of tears but I got there, I took myself back, to where your breath escaped you, where mine turned a dark, dark gray, but I got there,...in time. I returned to where everything changed for you,...for me,...for us all. It took some time, it took echoes of cries, but I got there. I took myself, to where your heart slowly slipped and mine swelled with pain, but I got there. And when I did,...I found something, something that makes me so unexplainably happy that I got back there...that I returned. In a bush,...there was your baseball hat blowing gently in the breeze... still there,...from that night. it's amazing it was still there... it was blowing in the gentle wind, in sort of a beckoning way. Almost to get me to notice it there, almost as if it were you... making it dance so I'd see it... I took myself back,.. I made it there...and there I found.... a piece of you. This piece of you,...is a piece of me. and I'm so glad that I returned I'm so thankful to you for giving me the strength to get back,...to close it this way. To take this piece of you home. I took myself back....... and I took a piece of you back too. *Missing You* |
||
© Copyright 2000 SpitFire - All Rights Reserved | |||
Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Wonderful--the baseball cap--a perfect touch! |
||
Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Spit Fire, So glad that you found the courage to return. Without it, you would never have found the baseball hat or the closure that you seem so desperately to seek. I am happy you were able to take yourself back in the process....a true gift indeed. Great writing! Lone Wolf Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end. --Michael W. Smith |
||
SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~Thank you Martie for reading and replying. This is true,..after the accident his hat somehow got stuck there in the bushes by the road,...and there it stayed for some time. Thanks again. *Peace. |
||
Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
SpitFire~ How poignant this piece. *Hugs* to you for writing it and sharing it with us. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
||
Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
This was so touching SpitFire ... I'm so glad that you were able to retrieve something that allowed you such gentle closure. Wonderful and expressive writing. Best wishes, /Kit |
||
tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Remarkable piece little spitfire. Thankyou for sharing this with us, you finding the cap was meant to be and to help ease your pain. much love and understanding sent your way. HUGS TC Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
||
RSEvans Senior Member
since 1999-10-23
Posts 1147Tulsa, OK, USA |
A very moving piece. Good closure. Thank you. |
||
Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
This is amazing - love the style...and you have excellent imagery here. |
||
Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
SF, this is so perfect and well expressed. wonderful and hearfelt writing. I am moved by your words. we heal our hearts as we write. take care, jm There are places inside our souls ... that have never been touched. There are places inside our hearts ... that need to be loved this much. ~Janet Marie~ "What the caterpillar calls the end ... The world calls a butterfly" ~Lao Tze Tao~ ~Butterflies are meant to be free~ |
||
⇧ top of page ⇧ | ||
All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format. |