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Poetic Nightmare
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania 
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Poetic Nightmare A poem just pops into my head It really blows my mind I conjure up exquisite thoughts That leave the others blind These notions only come to me Beyond the midnight hour That’s when my muse of poetry Exudes her mighty power I get this real dynamic thought That pounds my brain all night I toss and turn, and let it burn Into the morning light It gathers up momentum As it tumbles round and round And forms into a solid ball Of rhythm, thought and sound The perfect verse, the perfect rhyme The perfect charming grace This poem’s sheer perfection Is so perfectly in place It’s been ingrained into my brain I’m repetition worn But that’s the price of glory When a masterpiece is born But let me sleep just one more hour The poem’s etched in my head When I awake I start to shake And jump right out of bed I better sprint down to the screen And write this baby down I’ll never write one quite like this The jewel upon my crown So many verses in my head Now how should I begin I think I’ll write the last one first Beginning at the end But first jot down that middle thought Into the hard drive, please That one that’s going to rock the world And bring it to its knees Now let me see, how did it go How did I word that phrase It really was quite brilliant But my mind is in a daze Now let’s go back and quick backtrack This is a sorry plight To reconstruct the spendid thoughts That taunted me all night I’m getting just a little shook That I can not recall The words, the thought, the meaning Or the subject of it all You can’t catch fish upon a wish Quick grab them from the hook Your muse won’t wait and compensate The snoozing time you took My muse is down, she just left town The bait can’t last all day I can’t believe I blinked and Let the big one get away! Elizabeth Santos |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Liz, I loved this!! Great poem!!! Oh how I am sure we have all been there at one time or another....great idea and no place to write it!! LOL....wonderful writing!  Lone Wolf Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end. --Michael W. Smith |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
Very cute, and reminiscent of PdV's "Poet's Prayer"! Elizabeth "He have his goodness now. God forbid I take it from him!" -The Crucible |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Yep, I know just what you mean. One time I actually got up and wrote down some brialliance and then went back to bed...alas when I awoke, gibberish was what I'd said. You haven't lost you muse Liz...it's still bright eyed and bushy tailed...loved this poem! |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
This is a treasure Liz ... to the printer this goes, so when next I'm at a loss, you'll get my rhythm flowing again! Loved this!! Best wishes, /Kit |
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fractal007 Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958 |
That was the epitemy(sp) of what happens to me all the time! I get this really awesome idea and then it leaves me the next second! A very good poem, and also a poem that has a message. When you've got an idea, write it down!!! I also have a question: What exactly is a muse? I always hear statments like, "Oh, this guy is invoking a muse!".. What the heck does that mean? It almost sounds like the poet's summoning a monster or magical being or something... |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Liz, it is very strange to keep jumping out of bed to write down thoughts before they get away. You should do what us normal people do....keep a tape recorder next to the bed and, when a thought or line comes to you, hit the button and record it! Saves all that jumping up and down, yanno???  |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This is fantastic, Elizabeth! I love it! Denise |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
It’s been ingrained into my brain I’m repetition worn But that’s the price of glory When a masterpiece is born It is amazing what we come up with, and it seems perfect but trying to put the words to paper is harder than it seems. All part of the challenge. wonderful poem one we can relate to. ------------------------ "I've been too honest with myself I should have lied like everybody else"-Richey Edwards "Take nothing but pictures. Leave nothing but footprints. Kill nothing but time". Baltimore Grotto "Libraries gave us power Then work came and made us free What price now for a shallow piece of dignity" Nicky Wire, A design for Life. manic street preachers La Tristesse Durera (Scream to a Sigh) "Life has been unfaithful And it all promised so so much I am a relic I am just a petrified cry Wheeled out once a year, a cenotaph souvenir The applause nails down my silence La tristesse durera Scream to a sigh, to a sigh I see liberals I am just a fashion accessory People send postcards And they all hope I'm feeling well I retreat into self-pity, it's so easy Where they patronise my misery La tristesse durera Scream to a sigh, to a sigh I sold my medal It paid a bill It sells at market stalls Parades Milan catwalks The sadness will never go Will never go away Baby it's here to stay |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
LOL! Your ending was cute and frustrating at the same time. I agree with Balladeer about the recorder. Loved it. Nothing can deter a poet, for he is actuated by pure love. Who can predict his comings and goings? "Thoreau" |
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X Angel Senior Member
since 1999-11-07
Posts 1521Oregon |
LOL now this I can relate to, except my poem was written and submitted to Passions and I still kept trying to rewrite in my mind at the same time I was worrying about my business and other things LOL. I slept very little last night, due in a large part to my poetry! ~H |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Elizabeth, my friend~ This is just so absolutely refreshing ! Can't believe one ever got away from you. You're a natural-born fisherman ! My philosophy - When a poetic thought escapes me, it wasn't meant to be mine. It stopped to tickle my fancy and scurried to another mind. Sort of like trying on slippers, from rack to rack I flit ... Along comes Cinderella and finds the perfect fit ! Love you ~ ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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