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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart 
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If and When If and when I lose you what indeed will then be gone? For memories will stay and stay and in my heart … your song. If and when I lose you will I be old and gray? Will I even know you’ve left, and not even know the day? If and when I lose you will I grieve and be alone? Or will I remember happy times and see how our love had grown? Will I remember your special look, when you took my love? Will I remember your special touch, the one I’m dreaming of? So if and when you leave me know that in my heart you’ve given me of your all and in memory you’ll not depart. 1 June 2000 ©KRJ Sunshine Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Oh this is beautiful Sunshine... loved the last stanza the best. Well Done!  Je t'aime plus qu'hier et moins que demain." I love you more than yesterday and less than tomorrow (unkown) |
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Poet deVine
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since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Beautiful... |
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TerryW Senior Member
since 2000-03-23
Posts 779Louisville, Mississippi, USA |
Sunshine~ (sniff) Beautiful, dear! It is so lovely that it brought a tear to my eye. Bravo! Love Ya~ ~you reached inside, you touched my heart, and I am all the better for it~ Terry A. Woodson, Jr. |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Darkangel, PdV, Terry - thank you all. Terry, don't get your keyboard wet... Sunshine Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow |
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ESP Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556Floating gently on a cloud.... |
This is a truly beautiful poem....absolutely wonderful! Love and hugs, Lizzie  "Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight." |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Lizzie, your absolutely fills me with wonderful. Thank you... Sunshine ~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow. Helen Keller ~~~ |
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X Angel Senior Member
since 1999-11-07
Posts 1521Oregon |
Very nice I enjoyed this thoroughly...~Heather |
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Lorraine Nisbet Member
since 2000-05-18
Posts 218Jersey City, NJ USA |
Sunshine, Beautiful...simply beautiful. ~Lorraine A great poet is nothing more....than a discovered amateur |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Karilea~ So tenderly done. 'For memories will stay and stay and in my heart … your song.' That's the kind of memory that is always worth holding onto ... one that fills your heart with song. Love ya' ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
Sunshine-- this piece filled my heart with happiness and made me smile. thank you. beautiful hon! amy "Don't be dismayed at goodbyes. A farewell is before you can meet again. And meeting again after a moment or a lifetime is certain for those who are friends." "Fate exists but it can only take you so far, Because once you're there It's up to you to make it happen." |
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PoetasterD Junior Member
since 2000-06-03
Posts 42Florida |
Sunshine, This is a wonderful moving poem that truely inspires emotions (at least in me)! I like the entire work, but especially the first verse.... If and when I lose you what indeed will then be gone? For memories will stay and stay and in my heart … your song. And the ending is just as great! I look forward to reading more of your poetry. Best wishes! Poetaster D |
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Eloise Senior Member
since 1999-11-27
Posts 1096Wyoming |
Sunshine, this is such a touching poem. Our memories are always ours to keep no matter what. Well done. |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Sunshine Shining through once more hon touching, tender, beautiful, loving and much more This was a wonderful read thanks for posting for us. Luv TC~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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Tennessee Angel Senior Member
since 2000-06-03
Posts 661Tennessee |
Absolutely Breath-taking! |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
Wonderful work! God grant me the serenity to accept the people I cannot change, the courage to change the one I can, and the wisdom to know it's me. ~Unknown |
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Denise
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since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This is so lovely, Sunshine! Denise |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Thank you, XAngel,... Lorraine, I will accept your beautiful... Marge, tender works for me...thanks!... Amy, I'm so glad you're smiling... PoetasterD...you can find my works just about anywhere, have fun...welcome to Passions... Eloise, thank you... Tracie...glad you liked, thanks!... Tennessee, EagleOne, denise, thank you all very much... Sunshine ~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow. Helen Keller ~~~ |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Sunshine, Simply beautiful!! The ending was just perfect....I loved it. If we could all look at things this way, the world would be a better place. Lone Wolf Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end. --Michael W. Smith |
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Angel Senior Member
since 1999-07-02
Posts 551Pennsylvania |
Sunshine~ This was so beautiful...I loved it .~Susie "If we could read the secret history of our enemies, we should find in each man's life sorrow and suffering enough to disarm all hostility." ~Henry Wadsworth Longfellow "Driftwood" |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Lone Wolf, thank you...feel free to comment any time!... Susie, thanks much for coming in... [This message has been edited by Sunshine (edited 06-04-2000).] |
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