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Alone of You
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095
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Alone of You Alone of you I am the thorn behind the rose you have touched me and bled from me but the rose has only caressed you with its beauty, its charm, with the corners of its mouth turned up, wide it has not kissed your skin as I have. Dark Angel 2/6/00 Je t'aime plus qu'hier et moins que demain." I love you more than yesterday and less than tomorrow (unkown) |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
This is very interesting...I see a person who has not shown everything but hides behind bitter words after the love is gone. I am probably off base. But, I like this very much. Well done, Dark Angel. |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Interesting, I get a different feel from it than Sunshine. I think it's about infidelity. Good poem, my friend.  |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Interesting, Sunshine and Sharon  You both are sort of on the right track. Glad you enjoyed. Je t'aime plus qu'hier et moins que demain." I love you more than yesterday and less than tomorrow (unkown) |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
every rose has its thorn. God that sounded cliched. A wonderful poem, I really loved the following piece, beautifully written. but the rose has only caressed you with its beauty, its charm, with the corners of its mouth turned up, wide it has not kissed your skin as I have. ------------------------ "I've been too honest with myself I should have lied like everybody else"-Richey Edwards "Take nothing but pictures. Leave nothing but footprints. Kill nothing but time". Baltimore Grotto "Libraries gave us power Then work came and made us free What price now for a shallow piece of dignity" Nicky Wire, A design for Life. manic street preachers La Tristesse Durera (Scream to a Sigh) "Life has been unfaithful And it all promised so so much I am a relic I am just a petrified cry Wheeled out once a year, a cenotaph souvenir The applause nails down my silence La tristesse durera Scream to a sigh, to a sigh I see liberals I am just a fashion accessory People send postcards And they all hope I'm feeling well I retreat into self-pity, it's so easy Where they patronise my misery La tristesse durera Scream to a sigh, to a sigh I sold my medal It paid a bill It sells at market stalls Parades Milan catwalks The sadness will never go Will never go away Baby it's here to stay |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
I have to agree with Poet deVine here....sounds like infidelity for sure. Either that or someone has left you for another maybe? One who is not all that she seems perhaps....just a stab at the meaning. Nice writing, DA. LW Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end. --Michael W. Smith |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Could mean a number of things, now you've got my mind working.But no matter, I loved this metaphor, and it is a lovely piece. (Could be a love triangle, the thorn being the one with substance, and the rose having only beauty, or the thorn could be the wife and the rose the lover, or vice versa.) So which is it? Or none of the above? Liz |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Maree... this is the most beautiful thing you have ever written, definitely my favourite. Such a chill though...and there is envy here. I have a feeling Lizzy is right with the triangle thing - is that your focus? K |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Elizabeth, yes a love triangle it is indeed, the rose and the thorn are not each others lover, the thorn is the lover of the one spoken of(Alone of you) the rose a possible lover, a threat to the thorn, and the thorn is telliing the lover, that the rose is showing just its beauty, it has only careesed her with its beauty and I the thorn have kissed my lovers skin and my lover has touched me and bled from me. In other words I guess is ... "lover you KNOW me" Thanks Elizabeth, hopefully I've helped you understand what goes through this head of mine Soul-Sis, the answer to your question is as above Envy you ask?...nope more like Jealousy! Glad this is your favourite. Thanks for your lovely reply hon. Brian, thank you so much glad you enjoyed it. Lonewolf, thanks hon, do appreciate your comments. Je t'aime plus qu'hier et moins que demain." I love you more than yesterday and less than tomorrow (unkown) |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
this piece left me with lots of thoughts going on in my head. it is quite interesting and full of powerful intense images! thanks so much for sharing amy "Don't be dismayed at goodbyes. A farewell is before you can meet again. And meeting again after a moment or a lifetime is certain for those who are friends." |
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Rosebud1229 Senior Member
since 2000-04-05
Posts 1813North Carolina |
I am the thorn, loved this darkangel so much meaning in so few words. Came across very well. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
The title is captivating and the poem also...the uncertainty of meaning adds to its flavor. Well done! |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
DA, you left me totally speechless! Another favorite! This is breathtaking!!! |
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Rodney Belcher Member
since 2000-06-06
Posts 227Taylor, Michigan |
I too applaud the depth of meaning with the frugality of words...I also sensed a deeper feeling and the realness of the thorn when most give attention to the bloom...an interesting analogy. [This message has been edited by Rodney Belcher (edited 06-08-2000).] |
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Rhavin Junior Member
since 2000-05-27
Posts 28 |
My favorite thing about this poem was the meaning of it. I too loved it very much! |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Amy, thanks so much for reading Rosebud, glad you liked it. Thanks so much Martie Thanks so much Angel girrrl glad you liked. Rodney, yes the bloom always captures the attention, but the bloom also dies, even right before your eyes. Thanks for your lovely reply. Thanks Rhavin, so glad you enjoyed it. Je t'aime plus qu'hier et moins que demain." I love you more than yesterday and less than tomorrow (unkown) |
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