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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209
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nervous checking mail no wearing down my chair my keyboard my nerves checking mail yes reading words but more reading you every vowel and consonant cherished every verb and noun memorized ingested swallowed whole sustenance sparks fly from finger tips as I word myself in return heart and soul sent hopes and dreams flying cyber express long distance starvation hurting out the waiting minutes hours more minutes fading fast forget the time needing more words hungry for sustenance craving for a reason to reach out of the dark a reason to see to feel to heal to need sustenance [This message has been edited by Corazon (edited 05-31-2000).] |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Whew! Quite the wild ride! It's amazing how words, mere text across the screen can take on meaning in our lives, to the point of obsession, even! You have captured this perfectly! Corinne |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
I'm glad you posted this sweetheart...because and not Bal's 'because' but because words are so indicative but can be read so many different ways according to the heart...I read your words with my heart.. Bless...sweet dreams HUSG |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Corazon, what an excellent way to explain how much the nourishment of another's words are so vital to one's health. Watch out for the adverbs. They're fattening!  |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
trouble is, words can only sustain for so long... true sustenance of a relationship needs eyes, hands, touch, voice, hearing laughter, seeing smiling, sharing tears well, let me rephrase this... many beautiful relationships CAN be sustained through words and words are very very powerful and wonderful and deep.... but ... IMO, it's missing something of course, i'm just a bit lonely tonight for some human companionship and something other than words on a screen i identified with this poem very much, as usual, corazon... i always seem to identify with your poetry after i read it, i had to check my email just to see if i could find some sustenance take care.... doreen |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Another well written piece, Corazon!  Denise |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
Yep. This is a familiar feeling. Effectively written. I loved it. Nothing can deter a poet, for he is actuated by pure love. Who can predict his comings and goings? "Thoreau" |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
thaz me too good job corazon |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Corazon, I loved this.... I really know the feeling, been there done that, still do... I really like the style here. This is a hunger that needs to be fed.... Parker |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
Corinne thanks wrote this yesterday and posted without much editing, so I went home wondering if the road was driveable…..guess “wild” is good huh? lol RainbowGirl yep you are right about words, and how the heart can do its own twists and turns when reading, glad your heart enjoyed Balladeer, exactly…you put into one sentence what it took me a whole poem to do and thanks for the advise on those naughty adverbs (looking at her expanding hips and shaking her head)doreen peri, I know, I know, I really can’t sustain long distance relationships either, for the same reason, when it gets to the level that poem is written, the next thing I think of is a plane ticket and real arms….sigh….and yep, will be looking at my mail today too Denise thanks Temptress thanks, glad you liked wayoutwalt, thanks, means a lot, I love your poetry Parker, thank you, and yes I know, hunger can take over if you let it….whew (wipes her brow while checking mail) lol |
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Danny Holloway Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034Tulsa, OK |
Have to agree with the others. This was nice writing. I liked the style you used also. ~~intense~~ |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Corazon~ Wonderfully done. 'as I word myself in return' I like that idea a lot. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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