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Marina
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0 posted 2000-05-31 02:13 PM


This one is the second poem I ever wrote.  I post this one because I had recently reposted the first.

In the Light of Love Above


Flowers forever fragrant, dance in bloom
When Heaven’s gate opens
Birds beautiful harmony whistle their tune
In the light of love above


Hourglass of sand, no longer we will know
In picturesque soft meadows of time
Endless breezes of summer’s show
In the light of love above


Forever souls of destiny in sunsets blush
Colours radiant rainbow in June
Beats for eternity in hearts humble hush
In the light of love above


Marina Feb 16/2000



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Butterflies_dont_cry
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1 posted 2000-05-31 02:19 PM


Breathtakingly beautiful!! I love the images and the flow, Thank you for sharing this!!
brian madden
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2 posted 2000-05-31 04:30 PM


the second one... wow...you were born to write poetry Marina. beautiful,

Forever souls of destiny in sunsets blush
Colours radiant rainbow in June
Beats for eternity in hearts humble hush
In the light of love above
really loved the last verse.




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"Here chewing your tail is joy"

Richey Edwards

"Take nothing but pictures. Leave nothing but footprints. Kill nothing but time".

Baltimore Grotto

"Will you accuse me as I hide Behind these layers of disguise And the mirrors of my own happiness.I've loved the freedom of being inside
Need a new start and a different time
Something grows in the space between me
And it's twisting and changing this fragile body" -Nicky Wire



Janet Marie
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3 posted 2000-05-31 05:12 PM


Hourglass of sand, no longer we will know
In picturesque soft meadows of time
Endless breezes of summer’s show
In the light of love above
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WOWOWOWOW
this is so lovely and so impressive for your early efforts...
WHAT TOOK YA SO LONG  
wondeful imagery girl!!
beautiful poem, truly
me thinks me needs to come to Canada,
me thinks the view is much lovelier there...
me and gemini will come play LOL
later poet-gator
jm

 There are places inside our souls ...
that have never been touched.
There are places inside our hearts ...
that need to be loved this much.
~Janet Marie~

"What the caterpillar calls the end ...
The world calls a butterfly"
~Lao Tze Tao~
~Butterflies are meant to be free~


Kit McCallum
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4 posted 2000-05-31 09:17 PM


This is an incredible poem Marina ... and I would never have known it was anyone's second attempt ... you were truly "born" a poet.  The flow and imagery are absolutely wonderful.

Thank you so much for sharing this beautiful verse in the "early poems" challenge.  Challenge exceeded Marina!

Best wishes,
/Kit

Marina
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5 posted 2000-05-31 09:22 PM


Butterflies, thank you

Brian, you are very sweet. Thank you fot your compliment

Jan, you get your butt up here girl!  I am going to take you places where we can get the biggest....Ehem....excuse me...I forgot what forum I was in!!!   Meet you in adult!


Marina

Marina
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6 posted 2000-05-31 09:27 PM


Kit, you snuck in there when I was replying.

Thank you very much for your compliment.  I am definitly not sure about "born" talent, but I am having fun writing.

Marina

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7 posted 2000-05-31 10:05 PM


Very beautiful, Marina. Your word selection is excellent and it flows easily through the mind. I like it!
Elizabeth Santos
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8 posted 2000-05-31 10:26 PM


Excellent! And only written 3 months ago?
An enjoyable read!
Liz

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9 posted 2000-05-31 10:35 PM


See girl,

I told you so

wonderful poem, and only your second attempt?

WOW

 All my love,
Jeffrey

I lie awake in a world filled with dreams,
but dreams can be so real when you don't know you're asleep



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10 posted 2000-06-01 12:27 PM


Simply wonderful Marina. . .

The light always shines. . .

Excellent...

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 That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl


tracie66
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11 posted 2000-06-01 05:44 AM


Oh this has such a lovely flow to it   very tender and touching.
Warms the heart    
Tracie~


 Love is the life of the soul...
It is the harmony of the universe



Danny Holloway
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12 posted 2000-06-01 11:00 AM


Gets a "10" on my poetry rating scorecard!
~~nice writing~~

Marina
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13 posted 2000-06-01 08:44 PM


A thank you to everyone.  As most of you noticed I wrote this one 3 months ago so as you can see I am a "Newbie" at this poetry writing thing.


Balladeer, thank you very much

Liz,thanks, yes I confess i am new at this.

jeff, thank you my friend.  I can always count on you.

Sven,thank you and I think you are right

Tracie, thanks...glad you enjoyed it.

Danny, you are so sweet! Thank you very much.

Marina

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